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Post by YABYUM » August 16th, 2005, 10:27 am

in my dreams i had straight teeth
i saw my grandparents
and my little sister had a strawberry cat

there were two dryers
and old word processor
and an indian man pushing mine and my exes luggage

my dad and older sister had already left
and they hadnt left a note

pop pop was playing around like a kid
much the same as I did

what a strange dream.
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Post by Axanderdeath » August 16th, 2005, 10:41 am

YABYUM wrote:in my dreams i had straight teeth
i saw my grandparents
and my little sister had a strawberry cat

there were two dryers
and old word processor
and an indian man pushing mine and my exes luggage

my dad and older sister had already left
and they hadnt left a note

pop pop was playing around like a kid
much the same as I did

what a strange dream.
I am asking because I really do not know. Why is this a hiku and not a poem--how does the sylible thing work
thus spoke G.A.P.

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Post by Glorious Amok » August 16th, 2005, 10:44 am

past divergences, realigned
family, smiling and waving
baggage, given over to a spirit guide sherpa
"YOUR way is your only way." - jack kerouac

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Post by YABYUM » August 16th, 2005, 7:35 pm

Geoff, it's not a haiku by definition. I believe a haiku is 5-7-5
three lines of syllable. I hate rules. I write myku. A myku is a quick spontaneous capture of visuals. Like a dream. Another way of writing the Myku is taking a deep breath, then read. If you get to the end of your statement and you are out of breath, that my friend, is also a Myku. Or in your case, a Yourku. Get it?
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Post by Axanderdeath » August 16th, 2005, 11:56 pm

yja iget it but I hold my breath and see how much I can do while the oxy leaves my stupid mind--hodiny would of been great an my myko--exhail--me!!
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Post by jimboloco » August 17th, 2005, 11:30 am

yja iget it but I hold my breath and see how much I can do while the oxy leaves my stupid mind--hodiny would of been great an my myko--exhail--me!!

groovy at last
way past reconciliation
this fucking nation

dig it death man oh
alive and breathing oh so
blooming cactus blossms
past divergences, realigned
family, smiling and waving
baggage, given over to a spirit guide sherpa
way heavy loads
make a caravan
oasis near the horizon
[color=darkcyan]i'm on a survival mission
yo ho ho an a bottle of rum om[/color]

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