Blow

[mtmynd]

Blow

there's a candle that burns
beyond my thoughts
where dreams are lit
from distant fires
set forth into flame
consumed
-inch by inch
-breath by breath
the wax of being dripping
-slowly
-warmly
-softly
...ideals never realized
but kept alive thru the light

[mousey1]

I like this Cec.

You've expressed, captured beautifully, similar feelings in me.

there's a candle that burns
outside my thoughts

I do wonder where exactly that would be? Outside your thoughts I mean.
I do think it should be, beyond my thoughts, or something similar to that.

What's the purpose of the hyphens?

I like where dreams are lit from distant fires.....couldn't that work?

Anyway a lovely write....just lovely. Thanks for sharing it. I really do feel hope in this. This poem has a soft, warm, wistful flavor. A calming effect.

[mtmynd]

mousey... i like your ideas. i shall implement them and 'see' how it reads... how flows... how it moves... (you can take a look, too!)

thx for the suggestions!

btw - the hyphens... they suggest a pause much like... dots, but only a wee bit quicker. hah! don't they look good..?