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magic square

Post by stilltrucking » March 20th, 2008, 8:21 pm

a square
in a round hole

every short cut taken
every magic bean planted
every botlle Alice drank from
every get enlightened quick scheme

has brought heartache and pain
naked to the wind lost in the woods
would not have it any other way life is beautiful
and I am grateful

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Post by mtmynd » March 22nd, 2008, 12:07 pm

"would not have it any other way life is beautiful
and I am grateful
"

sorry truck, but i can't help myself -

would not have it any other way
life is beautiful and I am grateful


:?:

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Post by stilltrucking » March 22nd, 2008, 12:45 pm

not much for theology anymore
but I do try to keep up with the latest scientific principles
quantum weirdness
and neuro
-theology

how the existence of sentient beings in the present changes the past
I now have a happy childhood
Life Is Beautiful is a movie I have watched it 15 times, 9 in italian with subtitles cause i love the sound of the Italaian language'


hard to explain it cecil
I have dear friends who are married
happily married in fact
sometimes I have to cut them some slack

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Post by mtmynd » March 22nd, 2008, 8:24 pm

i missed the point, clearly.

the repeated words i felt
'looked' better in that order
than the original... yea, but
who really concerns themselves
with things such as that...eh?

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Post by Doreen Peri » March 22nd, 2008, 8:48 pm

I am a firm believer
that poetry is typesetting.
How it looks, is as important
as what it means (almost) ;)

(I knew what you meant, cecil)

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Post by Doreen Peri » March 22nd, 2008, 8:51 pm

then again, it doesn't really matter.

lol :lol: 8)

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Post by mtmynd » March 22nd, 2008, 9:04 pm

ahh, Dor! Yes, someone understands!! Should not the written word appear as strongly as the intent? I believe we have a common answer to that question. hahaha! (and also understands that it quite possibly doesn't make a damn bit of difference!!!!)

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Post by stilltrucking » March 29th, 2008, 8:04 pm

thanks for the feed back cecil
I deleted a smart ass responce
you know SooZen said something to me about having a good memory.

Maybe not such a good thing if it makes a person resentful.

I got an attitude from litkicks that is hard to change, it has to do with their writers workshop, made me bitter an cynical, but like my old friend jitterbug tells "you always get what's coming, you never have to ask"
I would not have missed litkicks for the world. Any way it made me care little for my writting.

I will try to rewrite it when I have more time.
I think it was supposed to be about Television.

thanks for feed back
thank you alwo doreen

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