Blow
there's a candle that burns
beyond my thoughts
where dreams are lit
from distant fires
set forth into flame
consumed
-inch by inch
-breath by breath
the wax of being dripping
-slowly
-warmly
-softly
...ideals never realized
but kept alive thru the light
Blow
I like this Cec.
You've expressed, captured beautifully, similar feelings in me.
I do think it should be, beyond my thoughts, or something similar to that.
What's the purpose of the hyphens?
I like where dreams are lit from distant fires.....couldn't that work?
Anyway a lovely write....just lovely. Thanks for sharing it. I really do feel hope in this. This poem has a soft, warm, wistful flavor. A calming effect.
You've expressed, captured beautifully, similar feelings in me.
I do wonder where exactly that would be? Outside your thoughts I mean.there's a candle that burns
outside my thoughts
I do think it should be, beyond my thoughts, or something similar to that.
What's the purpose of the hyphens?
I like where dreams are lit from distant fires.....couldn't that work?

Anyway a lovely write....just lovely. Thanks for sharing it. I really do feel hope in this. This poem has a soft, warm, wistful flavor. A calming effect.
I used to walk with my head in the clouds but I kept getting struck by lightning!
Now my head twitches and I drool alot. Anonymouse
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Now my head twitches and I drool alot. Anonymouse
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