Death of a Poet

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saw
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Death of a Poet

Post by saw » March 21st, 2009, 9:39 am

I was totally
naked

on stage
the microphone
cold as my heart
my voice weak
from trying
for so long
to communicate
with you

still game
but ready
to submit
to your iron will
your imposing desire
to win at all cost
my last ditch
effort
my lead swan song

an aging fighter
climbs through the ropes
steps up to the podium
with a handful
of unruly
yellowed papers
breathes a sigh of relief
his final heckler's night

Great Poem if You're in a Coma
ha ha ha ha ha

You Call That a Metaphor, Pal
ha ha ha ha ha

One Word For You Chump....Meter !
ha ha ha ha ha
If you do not change your direction
you may end up where you are heading

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Post by Yejun » March 21st, 2009, 7:38 pm

This took me two reads, but I think the short lines enhance the effect.

And here's what my son thinks:

yuoimiiiiiiiuiiji iyituoi


h

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Post by Arcadia » March 22nd, 2009, 1:32 pm

ha ha ha!!!!!!!!
gracias!!!!! :)

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Post by saw » March 24th, 2009, 6:04 am

thanx Yejun , your son is quite articulate, and Arcadia, muchas gracias for the ha ha ha's........
If you do not change your direction
you may end up where you are heading

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Post by Doreen Peri » March 24th, 2009, 9:20 am

hehe.. oh geez.... very good ... one of our worst fears realized

i've got this phrase in my head to use in a poem with the same theme

"silhouettes in the exits"

i've been meaning to write it and post it for several weeks

i'll do it when i get over my stage fright :P

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Post by goldenmyst » March 25th, 2009, 1:45 pm

Poet warrior's last stand. Quite a rad poem. Enjoyable to the last syllable.

John

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Post by hester_prynne » March 27th, 2009, 9:58 pm

Even better poem when you're not in a coma!
H 8)
"I am a victim of society, and, an entertainer"........DW

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Post by saw » March 28th, 2009, 10:20 am

thanx doreen, john and hester,.... glad you could relate a little.......
If you do not change your direction
you may end up where you are heading

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