dream boulevard

[saw]

I want to cross you
like a bridge to ecstasy
span the infested hang ups
that gnash like demonic crocodiles

I want to dance like Astaire
step seductively across the tips
of those lurking reptilian razors
in my custom-made cathartic tuxedo

white gloves leaving no prints
as I enter your neighborhood,
I want to be inside you
without getting in the way

[dadio]

yes, good one, good poem.


I want to be inside you
without getting in the way

( fine lines)

[revolutionrabbit]

this is surrealist...to my sense

but since you seem to be consistent
in the thrust of the poem, it seems to
speak of sexual relationships, but it
also eludes that.That is why the poem
works.This does not also say that a poem
must always allure, or elude, but if it tries
too hard then it does neither.dig.We can then
agree that not all poems are created e-quill.
But some are more "singing in the rain" then others.

[creativesoul]

i really like this- i see it in many pieces, like one every day---

[Arcadia]

sharp dreaming antitetical language, saw!

[saw]

thanx dadio, rabbit, c soul, and arcadia.....enjoyed your comments and yes rabbit. my intention was for the poem to more than just sex, a poem about connecting on all the special levels when a relationship is very satisfying, and isn't a lot of work, when things just click, and everyone concerned just......feels good......and words are diminished in the equation...........thanx again