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saw
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empire

Post by saw » June 16th, 2011, 8:10 pm

the statuesque liberty
a looming monument
way out there in the dirty
harbor water, what a strange
helmet she wears, kinda kinky
those harpoonish thorns
sticking out into the clouds
like a once fierce battle cry
gone to whisper
that tiki torch looking oddly like
a single zippo flame in the dark
at a lynyrd skynyrd reunion tour
today
I stood in line with the others
rode the elevator to the top
to get a panoramic view
of the rotten apple
I blocked out the day
to get inside her head
If you do not change your direction
you may end up where you are heading

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Re: empire

Post by stilltrucking » June 17th, 2011, 4:22 am

I could ramble on for a thousand words trying to tell you why I liked your poem.
It was like a string of images strung together with care like a matched pearl necklace around her throat.


thanks for writing.


to get inside her head
that tied it together nicely

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Re: empire

Post by dadio » June 17th, 2011, 8:00 am

good poem & theme.

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Re: empire

Post by mnaz » June 18th, 2011, 3:50 pm

keep on rockin' in the free world. . . sucking wind and roaring proud !

(how's she holding up out there?)

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Re: empire

Post by WIREMAN » June 19th, 2011, 9:24 am

someday i wanna climb that gift from france.....images abound within your lines steve....
me I feel like I'm becoming some kinda Kung fu t.v. Priest.....

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Re: empire

Post by saw » June 19th, 2011, 11:22 am

thanx everyone...always good to hear from the congregation....happy father's day to all you dads..........
If you do not change your direction
you may end up where you are heading

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Re: empire

Post by Perdida » June 19th, 2011, 5:06 pm

I blocked out the day
to get inside her head
really liked that, actually liked it all....

I tried to do that myself some 20 odd years ago, i only got as far as her feet.
I don't recall there being an elevator though.

Enjoyed, as always :)
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