The Fear

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Axanderdeath
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The Fear

Post by Axanderdeath » March 20th, 2005, 2:04 pm

I feel sick
I am bored
and boreing
and little do I know
little do I see
broken eyes
i can't see!
the lasting life
love lost to me
in the night of darkness
in the light and sharpness
pound pound pound
goes my mind!
I see the tv blur
blur my life by
on and buy and by and buy
bye...
on and on
day after night after day
long broken thoughts of death
of the known and unknown
the fear.
thus spoke G.A.P.

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e_dog
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Post by e_dog » March 20th, 2005, 2:16 pm

the unknown is where the ego goes
and never returns

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Post by izeveryboyin » March 20th, 2005, 4:47 pm

enjoyable flow... wavery transitions that pull you in from line to line. wired like the man, and sober like the duck with the headphone on his ear so he can hear you get it on w/the words... word.
--k
sometimes I just like to breathe.

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hester_prynne

Post by hester_prynne » March 21st, 2005, 6:12 pm

Indeed the immobility of fear.....
the tv's blur.....
the last few gasps before.........???????

Nicely done Alex, and I think this one most of us can relate to in one way or another. ......
something gritty about this....I really like it....

H 8)

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