building the cat

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the mingo
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building the cat

Post by the mingo » March 28th, 2014, 11:47 pm

please come
if you show up
and find me under the car with only my legs protruding
& a banging noise going on
it won't be because i'm trying to fix something
but trying to tear something away that's broken
& don't worry about the alien music in the streets
trying to pass itself off as
a proper breakfast just as
the stars go down
then click! - a photograph - black & white
of a girl
with thin lips unhidden
by fall of hair
the tops of teeth peeking
behind the lips...
... i wonder what other poets
would have done with a girl
whose face was like that
they might have found a haiku moment
a whole new land or maybe
a continent even
or trees waking up
beginning to speak
to each other
as the turtles
still sleep
snugged in deep mud
just beneath the bottom
Doll, you may have found a place of rest but I'm still on the trail.

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Re: building the cat

Post by stilltrucking » March 29th, 2014, 11:53 am

8)

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Re: building the cat

Post by david » March 29th, 2014, 4:36 pm

Loved the imagery, the ending did it for me.
find me under the car with only my legs protruding
& a banging noise going on
I enjoyed "hearing" this as well as seeing it.

David

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the mingo
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Re: building the cat

Post by the mingo » March 30th, 2014, 9:29 am

Thx Jack
Thx David
Doll, you may have found a place of rest but I'm still on the trail.

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Re: building the cat

Post by Arcadia » March 30th, 2014, 2:23 pm

360º attention with surround music, smiling-witty poem mingo!!!!!!! :D Gracias for sharing it!

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Re: building the cat

Post by the mingo » March 30th, 2014, 8:36 pm

Thx Veronica - 8) 8) & you're welcome
Doll, you may have found a place of rest but I'm still on the trail.

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Re: building the cat

Post by dadio » March 31st, 2014, 1:38 am

One of your best. 8)

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