The truth behind it all

[Tjflowers80]

I close my eyes;
my mind won't sleep;
The time just flies;
With these thoughts I keep.

I feel so tired with it all;
I want to loose my sense of care;
To see who will be there when I fall
And when my silence is too much to bare.

I've waited in the cold and dark;
Knowing only one who fits profile;
His conversations gave way to start;
His hope brought out a shining smile.

His comfort melts stress in space and time;
His smile brings me to my knees;
His actions seem to send the sign;
As mine are all to clear to see.

May it be what it seems;
The moon in my darkened night;
May it be more than just a dream;
That brings not only love, but, light.

For I am not much but a simple sin;
Who grows fond of the man you are;
The woman who craves your touch upon her skin
While spiraling to the highest star.

For Adam

[68degrees]

Your stuff would sound lovely being read, I would think.

"…a simple sin…" Nice image. Is there such a thing?

Thanks for the poem.

68degrees

[creativesoul]

i can hear the hilbily preacher sayin- 'nothing simple about sin' and then
the rebel girl gets high and mighty and jumps up on her soap box and has to say how she feels about that-
this poem is so full it is dripping honey off the side of the cup in the sunlight-like bears full of berries in the mounai n tops

[Tjflowers80]

Thank you both for your replies. And yes there is such a thing because I being the woman I am, am simple to please and simple to love, the only thing is loving a woman such as me can be different in a very naughty way. Lol. Therefore I am as I have spoken upon the page above "a simple sin" lol. Thank you again.

Jess

[68degrees]

Thanks for your reply and explanation. Yes, I can see that "you" are the sin. My comment was directed at the action of the sin.

I like this even more.

68degrees

[whoaisme]

you got the juice now!!

love the line/idea of "May it be what it seems."

keep writing hard!!

[Tjflowers80]

Thanks again everyone for your comments here. It's wonderful receiving feedback.