WAITING'S WORSE.

Post your poetry, any style.
Post Reply
User avatar
dadio
Posts: 4652
Joined: December 10th, 2010, 1:20 pm

WAITING'S WORSE.

Post by dadio » November 15th, 2012, 3:47 am

Waiting’s worse. She knows it.
That old feeling known since
childhood. Then it was the parent,
the heavy hand, the punishment.

This is like it, but not like it. She
waits for him to come home. His
footfalls in the hall, his voice along
the passage. To gauge the tone,

the loud or softness. She sits, waits.
Be prepared, the mother said,
years back. The clock in the hall
sounds loud with its tick tock. Puts

hands between the thighs, anxiety
bites. For better for worse, the
vows said. Bruises like medals,
black eyes as reminders, a colour

ranging from black and blue to green
to brown or whatever it is. She cocks
an ear. Him? Maybe. The last time
it was she’d been seen with some

feller. She’d not of course. But it suited
as an excuse. She’d lost the baby by
the fall down stairs. What was that
all about? Was that the time she had

been late with his dinner? Or was that
some other? Baby’d be walking now.
Missed the first steps, the first word,
the live birth. Is that him? She bites a

finger nail. Feelings seem to run along
the nerves. What to say? What words?
The door opens along the hall, his voice
echoes mildly, we shall wait, we shall see.
Attachments
villers_400.jpg
ART BY MARIE VILLERS
villers_400.jpg (24.82 KiB) Viewed 297 times

david
Posts: 139
Joined: November 12th, 2012, 3:51 pm

Re: WAITING'S WORSE.

Post by david » November 15th, 2012, 11:55 am

can feel the tension Dadio......you bet..David

User avatar
dadio
Posts: 4652
Joined: December 10th, 2010, 1:20 pm

Re: WAITING'S WORSE.

Post by dadio » November 15th, 2012, 12:45 pm

I went back to my old style for this poem.

creativesoul
Posts: 4660
Joined: September 15th, 2005, 3:23 am
Contact:

Re: WAITING'S WORSE.

Post by creativesoul » November 16th, 2012, 9:48 pm

Well written- was there as you were-
reason is over rated, as is logic and common sense-i much prefer the passions of a crazy old woman, cats and dogs and jungle foliage- tropic rain-and a defined sense of who brings the stars up at night and the sun up in the morning---

User avatar
dadio
Posts: 4652
Joined: December 10th, 2010, 1:20 pm

Re: WAITING'S WORSE.

Post by dadio » November 17th, 2012, 5:42 am

Thank you, creativesoul.

User avatar
Atehequa
Posts: 488
Joined: July 9th, 2011, 8:01 am

Re: WAITING'S WORSE.

Post by Atehequa » November 17th, 2012, 6:29 am

A decent read.

User avatar
dadio
Posts: 4652
Joined: December 10th, 2010, 1:20 pm

Re: WAITING'S WORSE.

Post by dadio » November 17th, 2012, 8:56 am

Atehequa, thank you

Post Reply

Return to “Poetry”

Who is online

Users browsing this forum: No registered users and 2 guests