Laying on of Hands

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Barry
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Laying on of Hands

Post by Barry » December 5th, 2008, 10:16 pm

Two different hands
female hands
Laid over a knife
the hilt of a knife
Buried in a back
a male back

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Post by Doreen Peri » December 6th, 2008, 1:17 pm

Murder, especially between the sexes, makes for an intriguing topic.

I like this, Barry, because it leaves the reader open to imagining what the heck he did to piss her off enough to off him.

;)

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Post by Lightning Rod » December 6th, 2008, 1:27 pm

my back has no knife wounds
but there are many high-heel marks
I earned them
"These words don't make me a poet, these Eyes make me a poet."

The Poet's Eye

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Post by Nazz » December 6th, 2008, 6:17 pm

seems like a metaphor.

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Post by goldenmyst » December 6th, 2008, 10:20 pm

Barry, your ability to use concise words to convey powerful emotions is demonstrated here. I too see it as a metaphor. Kudos my friend.

John

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Post by MrGuilty » December 7th, 2008, 7:53 am

Women scare the hell out of me.
When they unite against their common enemy
I used to be smart

Free Rice

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Post by Barry » December 11th, 2008, 1:50 pm

It's a stark image they lingers long after the actual event.
Thanks for the comments.:)

Peace,
Barry

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Post by SmileGRL » December 13th, 2008, 8:34 am

...very vivid image barry. ouch

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