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Connected (w/audio)

Post by Doreen Peri » December 28th, 2008, 10:02 pm

I just recorded it..
http://www.studioeight.tv/dpmusic/connected.mp3

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I connected the dots,
connected the various interwoven
sequences, the patterns with my
fingers, the intersections of roads
and byways, the messages on
highway signs, the lines on mental grids,
the ingredients listed on lids and the
sides and backs of containers;

I connected the remainders after divisions,
the sums after additions, the equations
on two sides of an equal sign, what was
yours, what was mine, what was invisible,
what was clear, the variety of conclusions
at year's end, the recommendations by
friends with the interjections and sighs
of those who don't see eye to eye;

I connected from one train to the next
at numerous stations, one plane to another
from lost terminals, the vernal equinox
with the autumnal, summer with winter too,
and the way you looked into my eyes
to see through to a yearn;

Bridge:
See the lady pushing a cart?
She darts from one spot to the next.
Connected.
There are the self-named misdirected.
See them there? Rejected.
See the elderly who cannot see?
Why do you look the other way?
Because it's you who you
do not want to view perhaps.
See the hungry girl
a hemisphere away? Connected.
Bet the world in a gamble-trap.
Connected.

I connected the burn with the freeze,
the down-on-my-knees prayer with the air
we both breathe, the way the sky illustrates
the why answer, each jeté, each spotted spin,
all dancers selected for a choreographed role;

I connected the whole of me with each part of you,
the individual delusions of your heart-seek, the
entirety of you with my minute fantasies piqued by
a curious whim, the dim light with enhanced eyesight,
the right to the left, my bereft longing with a satisfied
union;

I connected, we connected, the solution to a distant
past; each line, each flirtation, each fast-counted day,
each and every way a connection could be made,
the trading of which I would never play for, the more
connected, the more adorned with yes;

And yes I said yes, I will yes, and rest I do
in the thought of the joining, our reflection
upon a sterling surface, our link primed,
our touch meshed,

as blessed as two
could be to be
a harmony
in unison.

2.

when i connect the dots with you,
i find the true outline
of a sublime and perfect form
formed like a song,
dotted half-notes and wholes,
sixteenths and eighths,
normal rhythms newly explored,
in sync like an improvised
chord, harmonics resonate,
our breathing like a well-
rehearsed choir a half a world
apart in the same room!


dp.12.28.08
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Post by Arcadia » December 28th, 2008, 11:41 pm

hermoso!!, gracias!!! :D

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Post by Doreen Peri » December 29th, 2008, 12:12 am

gracias, amiga! :)

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Post by stilltrucking » December 29th, 2008, 3:13 am

Like this a lot

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Post by Doreen Peri » December 29th, 2008, 12:27 pm

thanks, jack

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Post by Doreen Peri » December 30th, 2008, 4:14 am

i just added this recording... just recorded it (w/ some additions)

http://www.studioeight.tv/dpmusic/connected.mp3

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Post by Lightning Rod » December 30th, 2008, 12:13 pm

nice poem and nice reading

I like the way you've softened your voice
"These words don't make me a poet, these Eyes make me a poet."

The Poet's Eye

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Post by Doreen Peri » December 30th, 2008, 2:44 pm

I did? hmmm...

thanks, Clay

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Post by SmileGRL » December 30th, 2008, 5:53 pm

that's great doreen

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Post by judih » December 31st, 2008, 12:31 am

i listened to this last night but then had to go to t'ai chi
so, allow me to say that l-rod's comment got me to click right then and there

your voice is smoother, somehow, more 40's. i got the feeling of a t.s. eliot kind of cadence in the lines.

i love audio! ( i loved this poem as a written piece, but it's another world as spoken)

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Post by Arcadia » December 31st, 2008, 10:10 am

yeah, it´s a beautiful more broken dramatic voice!

but I also liked the more grave-sometimes funny tones in other doreen recordings! I can´t avoid also listen to them through this one.

hermosa voz, hermoso poema!!!!!! :D

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Post by constantine » December 31st, 2008, 10:17 am

neat photo. you were beautiful then and now. the poem is an extension of that beauty.

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Post by Doreen Peri » January 1st, 2009, 2:51 am

thank you all.. you're very kind
i really did nothing different with my voice
it's the same... always the same.. my own passion

nothing more dramatic, nothing the least bit softer,
nothing other than what my voice always has been....

i appreciate your kindness truly
thanks for listening
happy new year!

.........

and dino.. i changed the photo since you replied.... i keep changing them.. had one of me up there when i was a child... you are a dear to flatter me like that

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Post by Doreen Peri » January 1st, 2009, 3:16 am

just listened to it again
end of it... last stanza really is way too dramatic...
too much emotion... last stanza
not happy with that.. needs rerecording that part
anyway it's just what it is
lol

gnight and happy 09 again

(nothing softer about it though.. maybe this little recording device i have is better than using a mic? I donno.. whatever... same voice.... no other change other than the recording mechanism... lol.. gnight)

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Post by Nazz » January 2nd, 2009, 5:22 pm

Nice, Doreen.

Explore more spiritual connections,
the ones that seem to remain elusive to the human world,
no matter networked and wired up it becomes.
Nice reading too. Enjoyed.

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