Past lives in a suitcase

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Past lives in a suitcase

Post by hester_prynne » January 11th, 2009, 11:50 pm

Past lives in a suitcase.
Old notebooks.
Diaries.

Written in
a youthful cursive.
Stages of a life
wailed in pen.

Embarrassing.
Regrettable.
Self absorbed.

All my dreams
transformed,
into inky little deaths
of knowing.
"I am a victim of society, and, an entertainer"........DW

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Post by Nazz » January 12th, 2009, 5:11 am

"wailed in pen"... that's really good, Hes. Me dig.

Seems there are always at least a few "nuggets" of a more universal nature in those earlier, more self-absorbed accounts... all "part of the journey".

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Post by judih » January 12th, 2009, 10:26 am

i love the 'inky deaths of knowing'

good, concise work

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Post by constantine » January 12th, 2009, 12:27 pm

i agree. economy without losing substance. fine stuff.

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Post by one of those jerks » January 12th, 2009, 4:45 pm

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She is twice the man I am.

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Post by saw » January 12th, 2009, 4:46 pm

sometimes I can hardly believe some of the things I said, wrote, did...it's like it's a total stranger.....each decade a complete remake...
in retrospect it was nothing more than growth pains, necessary and unavoidable stretches of muscle, bone, plasma, neurons, the whole shebang.....nice economy emphasizes your story.........
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you may end up where you are heading

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Post by SmileGRL » January 27th, 2009, 1:50 pm

never regrettable
all beautiful
even the embarrassing
because it is you
it is life
it is

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i get this (& i love the simplicity AND the complexity of it). just me being all preachy and wise assed this morning :mrgreen: you rock miss hes

"inky little deaths"...wow

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Post by Perdida » January 28th, 2009, 5:29 am

All my dreams
transformed,
into inky little deaths
of knowing.
absolutely love this hester.
The path to true love isn't always straight.
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