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Post by **SmileGRL** » January 29th, 2009, 3:01 pm

for my sisters, chosen in life and with love…

heart, i am your sister. we are free & soFt & dark. we are caged inside our childhood tears. rain softly on this heart. but we can only stay. here. barely enough. hovering on the edge of our dreams. our feet dangling dangling dangling. our wings cut from the same paper. delicate & tough. & the sun will aLways shine again. no matter how rough. how broken. how this is life. we gather our pieces every day. we stay. you are my sister. twin of my souL. heart of my heart. freckle on my wing. & heaRt, i miss you every day

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art to match @ http://smilegrl.blogspot.com/ (Jan 13, 09)

Post by **Lightning Rod** » January 29th, 2009, 3:37 pm

sometimes your flow entrances me
and then your random Caps are like a left hook

it gets to the point where I'm punch drunk
and I don't care what you are saying
just keep saying it

Post by **SmileGRL** » January 29th, 2009, 4:52 pm

well, damn! of course you need to care what i say

buT i will keep on saying it none the less...glad i entranced and left hooked

ps. thanks for the help on the voice thing. i got youtube and are just sorting out some technical things before posting.

Post by **SmileGRL** » January 30th, 2009, 11:00 am

okay...i thought about this again, and if the caps really bothers, i will post without them in future. i get that it makes it difficult to read / flow. i will try not to left hook again (not with caps anyway

)

so here is the poem without caps:

heart, i am your sister. we are free & soft & dark. we are caged inside our childhood tears. rain softly on this heart. but we can only stay. here. barely enough. hovering on the edge of our dreams. our feet dangling dangling dangling. our wings cut from the same paper. delicate & tough. & the sun will always shine again. no matter how rough. how broken. how this is life. we gather our pieces every day. we stay. you are my sister. twin of my soul. heart of my heart. freckle on my wing. & heart, i miss you every day

Post by **mtmynd** » January 30th, 2009, 2:36 pm

no, no. that won't do. those caps is what puts the frosting on your cakes. little smiles. just like you. don't change. maybe you will someday. change. but it's not necessary right now. keep on cappin'.

Post by **Lightning Rod** » January 30th, 2009, 2:42 pm

mj,
I know I have given you grief about your random caps in the past
but truth is, they kinda grow on you
they serve to stop the reader in his tracks for a moment
don't abandon the stylism

Post by **bennie2** » January 30th, 2009, 3:03 pm

I like the "random" caps thing. I got it right from the start. It's an MJ form of punctuation. It's a hihat, bass drum and snare all rolled into one, capable of sixteenths, fours and backbeats.

I read them as I read (or would if I could read) rests in music notation, line breaks in poetry, the backbeat of a great rock n roll song... they work.

considering that this isn't even your language... I think you do great things with it.

Post by **Perdida** » January 30th, 2009, 4:11 pm

Mj, i really needed to read someting like this and i read it like it was written for me. I hope you don't mind.

it's beautiful, and so are you.

Love every word and line, especially these...

our wings cut from the same paper. delicate & tough. & the

msun will aLways shine again. no matter how rough. how broken. how this is life.

thank you Lovely.

you;re really moving me.

Post by **SmileGRL** » January 30th, 2009, 4:19 pm

cecil..."the frosting on my cakes (you remember that painting of the flying cakes, don't you)...the little smiles"...i like that. thanks for the encouragement

clay...i don't mind the giving me a hard time. but i don't wanna be ignorant either, so if it grows on you, cool. but if it does bother. too much. please don't suffer in silence...

thanks for the grins

bennie...exactly...the drumroll & the line breaks. thanK you for saying aLL that. specially the last line

Post by **SmileGRL** » January 30th, 2009, 4:24 pm

maree...of course i don't mind. you aRe one of my sisters. i would mind if you didn't read it like that. thank you for all the beautiful things you say, heaRt. biG big hug. mj

Post by **goldenmyst** » February 3rd, 2009, 4:40 pm

Your poems are like a sun shower, dappling me with refreshing feelings which awaken my soul to soft and feminine visions transcendent.

John

Post by **SmileGRL** » February 4th, 2009, 2:49 pm

john, glad i could dapple & awake. if i am the sun (sometimes)...you are aLways the star, my friend

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