A beautiful hazel thing

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hester_prynne
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A beautiful hazel thing

Post by hester_prynne » March 1st, 2009, 6:42 am

Scrutin eyes.
Peering out
from folds
in the fat of the land.
Four old, obsolete, nearsighted orbs.
The wide ones thought
the beady ones were boss.

I did what anyone would do
when I found them.
I wasn't cruel.
I explained to them why
they had to go.
Then I yanked them out.
They shattered like brittle mirrors.

I melted them after that.
Into one big eyeball.
A beautiful hazel thing.
When it looked at me,
I felt fine.
No fear.
Just loved.
"I am a victim of society, and, an entertainer"........DW

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Post by saw » March 1st, 2009, 9:58 am

I like the mysterious story, which could be about the speaker's parents and creating a preferred situation to the existing one...
in any case, a cool story. kind of a sci-fi tale of transformation.....
If you do not change your direction
you may end up where you are heading

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Post by stilltrucking » March 1st, 2009, 10:39 am

The wide ones thought
the beady ones were boss.
I wasn't cruel.
I felt fine.
No fear.
Just loved
I read your poems these days and I wonder at the changes,

are they my changes or yours
both probably.



wonderful poem


"I used to stand and wonder, now I only stand" jitterbug

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Post by SmileGRL » March 3rd, 2009, 1:20 pm

one i
is a
beautiful
thing
no
fear

i like a poem with a good story in it. enjoyed miss H.

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