red cellophane

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Post by constantine » January 19th, 2010, 8:49 am

she told me it wouldn't be a problem
it wasn't - it was a catastrophe
she ignored my fifty-six years of experience
and relied on her twenty-three instead
when her dad opened the front door
his eyes got sort of ovoid and bulgy
then they narrowed,
like he was aiming a rifle
while staring through red cellophane
i tried to engage him in conversation
but everything i said came out wrong
like double entendre,
like i was trying to piss him off
i said i really admired his daughter
and then i drooled!
i couldn't believe it, but there it was
like damning evidence, it plopped
on his glass coffee table and quivered

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Post by stilltrucking » January 19th, 2010, 9:01 am

I wish I had put that first reply here. I probably would not have deleted it.
You could have told him that you just want to baby sit her for a while.
Just a little while,

I liked it a lot dino, I felt like I should have been laughing but I did not. I admire the way you can get it all down so succinctly.
I admire your courage,

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Post by constantine » January 19th, 2010, 9:19 am

though it is fictitious, there is an underlying angst that prompted it. i look at some of the young women at college - pretty and intelligent, and i'm stymied by my age. so i play it out in a poem and see that it's their time - not mine, that they are beyond the pale and rightfully so. i feel like the guy in death in venice - unable to come to grip with his own mortality. then i laugh!

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Post by constantine » January 19th, 2010, 10:00 am

no, i don't laugh. i'm not that strong to laugh.

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Post by stilltrucking » January 19th, 2010, 10:56 am

It was a little gem
I don't know what else to call it dino
You have a gift for getting it down on paper.
But you have to know I am looking at it from another time frame.
I have played that scene out in my mind too.

One of the things I remember from my deleted post was this bit
"Thanks for the poem dino, you took 14 years off my life with that one"

I did not laugh either but I did smile.

another bit I remember from the deleted post was
"Keep on keeping on"
It cheers me up to read your poetry, no matter what the content it is a joy for me to read you.

I feel like a kid in one of your college courses. You know what they say those "that can't do teach" If you ever decided to cash in on your gift I am buying.
Remember that song by Johnathan Edwards "Sunshine" love that song.

speaking of teaching I found this link
http://academicearth.org/
I been thinking about going back to college. I think I accumulated about 100 credits over twelve years (1959-1971) I finally got enough credits to fit together to make junior standing in 1971. Do they still have such a thing as "junior standing" anymore?
Do I have to explain what it was?

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Post by constantine » January 19th, 2010, 2:11 pm

i'm trying to get my work together according to theme, but there's a lot of overlap. still have to get them all on word doc format. you'd be coming in at the same point that i'm at right - around 3rd year status - a junior. you should. with your background in social science and philosophy, plus your wealth of general knowledge - you'd be miles ahead of the rank and file.

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Post by stilltrucking » January 19th, 2010, 3:05 pm

If I go back to school for anything it would be for dance lessons. Never too late to learn to dance.

Sorry if I layed(laid) the praise on too thick. I Got dam herbal enthusiasm blues again don't ya know.

It was a neat little poem, a real alfred j proofrock diddy.

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Post by constantine » January 19th, 2010, 4:13 pm

that's funny. i always wanted to be a song and dance man but i'm too inhibited and can't sing. but give me a valium and i can do it all!

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Post by mousey1 » January 20th, 2010, 1:59 am

Oh my oh my oh my you gave me such a chuckle.

In fact I almost guffawed.

This is precious. So glad I stumbled in here. Written to perfection.

When you give a smile you give a great gift, thank you! :D
I used to walk with my head in the clouds but I kept getting struck by lightning!
Now my head twitches and I drool alot. Anonymouse

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Post by constantine » January 20th, 2010, 4:35 pm

thank you, mousey. delighted to hear from you. i don't really know you that well, but your kind words speak volumes.

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