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hester_prynne
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Want home

Post by hester_prynne » October 2nd, 2010, 1:26 am

Want quiet.
Shut up mind....
Leaves fall,
hummingbirds whir,
spiders spin.

I know the score now.
Origins 3 floors below....
I made it up to second,
tookah lotta lumps,
bla bla.

Want home.
Click heels together....
Belt out a song,
success is a hoax,
and so is Romeo.
"I am a victim of society, and, an entertainer"........DW

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Re: Want home

Post by RonPrice » October 2nd, 2010, 1:53 am

Good solid succinct set of words, hester_prynne. Some might call this a minimalist style. You make your points, though, indeed, several points.-Ron in Tasmania 8)
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Re: Want home

Post by Arcadia » October 3rd, 2010, 10:12 pm

great view...!!!!!!! :lol: gracias, hester!!!!

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Re: Want home

Post by RonPrice » October 3rd, 2010, 11:11 pm

thanks again, Arcadia, for your enticing response.- Best wishes from Australia 8)
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Re: Want home

Post by joel » October 4th, 2010, 1:17 pm

(...of course I trust you'll see Romeo's tongue-in-cheek....)

Success – I hope – success – I hope – is not a hoax
but expectations are:
success is confidence that all emblazoned smokes
no matter where the fount of fuel has been who stokes
the coal that smolders flame, or gas that burns a star.
Success is not a hoax, but call to question those
who ask: Am I Successful? My successes char
whatever I suppose
my expectations were.
"Every genuinely religious person is a heretic, and therefore a revolutionary" -- GBShaw

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Re: Want home

Post by RonPrice » October 4th, 2010, 7:21 pm

Now that was a little twister for the brain, joel. "Good...onyer," as they say in Australia-Ron 8)
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Re: Want home

Post by Michael » October 5th, 2010, 9:50 am

And then there's "be where your feet are". Can't be anyplace else, hey?

To friendship,
Michael

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Re: Want home

Post by RonPrice » October 5th, 2010, 6:30 pm

That's a new one to me, Michael. thanks from Tasmania.-Ron :D
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Re: Want home

Post by saw » October 5th, 2010, 7:23 pm

life's disillusionments, surprises.....neatly wrapped up in fast forwarded language......hip and succinct in all the right ways......cool stuff, hest
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