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god

Post by sonofthesun » October 30th, 2010, 1:50 am

know that god is within us
in each breath exhaled
each leave that falls
each pebble that is tossed
nothing is alone
we die constant to beget
something else
There is no empty space

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Re: god

Post by happytrails » October 30th, 2010, 1:14 pm

Beautiful. Peaceful.

One note. Third line, that should be leaf, not leave.

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Re: god

Post by sonofthesun » October 30th, 2010, 9:54 pm

thanks for the reply.
i know i decided not to change it after i looked up the definition of leave.
to go out of or away from, to go without taking or removing
the free dictionary also listed leave as an intransitive verb meaning to put forth foliage
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Re: god

Post by happytrails » October 31st, 2010, 8:09 am

Ahhh, it reads a little differently if leave is used in that way, but yeah, okay.

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Re: god

Post by sonofthesun » November 10th, 2010, 1:27 am

yeah, okay, okay, yeah
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Re: god

Post by SmileGRL » November 10th, 2010, 2:52 pm

at first read this poem seems innocent and simple (in the nicest possible way). but on second and third read, it goes to a much much deeper level.
know that god is within us
in each breath exhaled
each leave that falls
each pebble that is tossed
nothing is alone
we die constant to beget
something else
happytrails...this is what i've been trying to say...god is (in) everything, nothing is coincidence, we hurt to grow or let others grow.

sonofthesun...i like "each leave that falls" now that you have explained it. it strengthens the depth of the poem if the reader knows that it's intentional. i truly appreciate this poem right now from both where i am in life (and the death of my brother) and spiritually. it speaks to my soul.

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Re: god

Post by stilltrucking » November 11th, 2010, 11:06 am

G d so personal for me
I find solace in the thought
that G d is indifferent
and has blessed me with benign neglect

standing on the edge
frozen in fright above the abyss
I step out onto the nothingness

I have read that the fear of G d (the Lord? of creation) is the beginning of wisdom
I must be plenty wise in my own eyes

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Re: god

Post by stilltrucking » November 11th, 2010, 11:20 am

... and tonight the stars'll be out, and don't you know that God is Pooh Bear? the evening star must be drooping and shedding her sparkler dims on the ...
who's afraid of the Pooh Bear?
Not Jack Kerouac.
But he was Catholic not a Jew.
But I suppose that is not mutaully exclusive
I wish I could be a Catholic too.

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Post by SmileGRL » November 11th, 2010, 2:26 pm

jack... a few years back after reading the book "mister god, this is anna" by fynn and "conversations with god" by neale donald walsch, and listening to the music of "live" (reading about the lead singer's thoughts about god) and talking to a lot of spiritual friends and teachers, i finally understood the saying "god is so full that he is empty" along with "hell is right here on earth."

i finally understood that god is so unfathomably big and all encompassing and so nonjudgmental of what we do here on earth, that we can just as well be all alone.

this notion scared the shit out of me.

(isn't god supposed to protect us? we have made up this religion in which god is to be feared and worshiped and in return he will protect us. when god doesn't need any of that.)

some days it still does (scare me). other days i realize that we have been given the gift of experiencing life in all its beauty and all of its pain. some days i think "we are god" and some days i realize how we are so stupid that we screw up continuously trying to navigate life and karma.

and then there are days when i realize the grace and the compassion the universe/god/creation is extending towards us in this brilliant web of nothing being coincidence and everything being for a bigger reason.

there is no need to fear god. and yet there is every need. someone once said that fear is an illusion as a result of judgment and unmet expectations...

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Re: god

Post by SmileGRL » November 11th, 2010, 2:27 pm

ps. i feel blessed to have conversations like this with open minded friends

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Re: god

Post by stilltrucking » November 11th, 2010, 3:01 pm

The acid that first time in 1972 left me with a desire for G d. Or what I thought it was back then. Since then my belief has evolved to what I can only think of as quantum mysticism. The G d of Spinoza and Einstein.


I think about those heretics burned at the stake for their faith. I don't know if I have that kind of courage.

please pardon the ramble Son of the Sun
The only religion I got left is Friendship

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Re: god

Post by SmileGRL » November 11th, 2010, 3:25 pm

friendship is a good religion.

yes, sonofthesun, thanks for giving us pause to think and discuss through sharing your poem.

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Re: god

Post by jim turner » November 11th, 2010, 6:58 pm

I like this, short and to the point. jim

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Re: god

Post by stilltrucking » November 12th, 2010, 8:22 am

Friendship
that is The Religious Society of Friends (Quakers)
The Peace Testimony, which is a very important Quaker principle, arose out of the belief in the in-dwelling Light or ``that of God'

http://www.quaker.org/friends.html'

know that god is within us
in each breath exhaled
each leave that falls
each pebble that is tossed
nothing is alone
we die constant to beget
something else



Yes the Quakers spoke of "that of god within us"
But they also believed music is the Devil's work

So I wonder what else is in me
Am I all sugar and spice
and sweetness and light
or does even a G d have a darkside
I have called a truce with G d
I will never understand
Who do I think I am
Job?




In 1972 at the tender age of thirty-two
I found G d with the aid of LSD
yes I saw the light
I was blinded by the light
I asked G d now wont you please bring me an Eve
and SHAZAM
just like that I found true lust
I got everything I asked for
as if I had a monkey's paw


Forty years later at t he tender age of seventy
I have found the darkness too
remorse and regret
for what I have done
for what I have wasted

Not crying about the leaving
I have given up on Redemption
But if I ever harm another human being
Jesus and Christ and Nietzsche too
Will come down and hit me upside the head
with a baseball bat

All is well
Amor Fati

that's so glib
Do I really mean it?
"only my dying will tell
and when I die
there will be one child born
to carry on"

the sorrow
and the joy.

that is what I can testify about G d.
have I defaced your poem with my rambles?
Maybe Doreen or Judih could delete my posts
I would not mind at all if you asked her to.

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Re: god

Post by SmileGRL » November 12th, 2010, 10:31 am

we all struggle with god and faith. i think it's good to share our views and experiences and understand that we don't have to be perfect (or perfect in our faith).

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