synthetic love

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saw
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synthetic love

Post by saw » February 9th, 2011, 9:34 am

words remained remarkably stable
meanings fell apart
more time brought nothing but
hucksters, opportunists, charlatans

socratic methods did not shine a beacon
into the tunnel of love, rather
common english read like sewer pipe sanskrit
scribbled in the margins of our breath
If you do not change your direction
you may end up where you are heading

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dadio
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Re: synthetic love

Post by dadio » February 9th, 2011, 12:51 pm

Deep poem; enjoyed. :)

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Re: synthetic love

Post by joel » February 9th, 2011, 4:26 pm

I'm too distracted to pull out its meaning(s)...but I'm loving its sounds, syllables...and I'll enjoy coming back to it.
"Every genuinely religious person is a heretic, and therefore a revolutionary" -- GBShaw

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Re: synthetic love

Post by creativesoul » February 9th, 2011, 5:49 pm

well done, however it made me wanna brush my teeth
reason is over rated, as is logic and common sense-i much prefer the passions of a crazy old woman, cats and dogs and jungle foliage- tropic rain-and a defined sense of who brings the stars up at night and the sun up in the morning---

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Re: synthetic love

Post by justwalt » February 9th, 2011, 8:09 pm

ain't it da truth...

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Arcadia
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Re: synthetic love

Post by Arcadia » February 9th, 2011, 11:46 pm

words remained remarkably stable ... first image a sort of vital signs pumping on a screen, I like how the poem continues, gracias for share it!!!! :lol: :)

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Re: synthetic love

Post by revolutionrabbit » February 10th, 2011, 4:18 am

yup

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