STRIPTEASE.

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dadio
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STRIPTEASE.

Post by dadio » March 4th, 2011, 4:26 pm

Eileen watches Fenola undress.
The study begins from the first

Removal of the blouse, the way
The fingers undo the buttons,

The intensity of the eyes, the pointy
Tongue hanging out, the breathing

Calm, then the taking off the skirt,
The letting fall to the floor, then

Kicking away. Eileen smiles. Fenola
Unpins the bra from behind her back,

The small tight breasts revealed stand
Stiff, the hand flings the bra across

The air to a nearby chair, then slowly,
Like some striptease artist, removes

The panties and tosses them across
The room where they fall over the head

Of a small statue of a cat. Fenola looks
At Eileen studying her. What? She asks,

Haven’t you seen it all before? What’s
So new that’s caught your eye? Eileen

Pulls her into bed and whispers, I want
To see it all a thousand times and you

Beside me making love, before we die.
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Re: STRIPTEASE.

Post by judih » March 4th, 2011, 11:33 pm

such a tender piece
lovely, dadio

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Re: STRIPTEASE.

Post by dadio » March 5th, 2011, 3:55 am

Thank you, judih. :)

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Re: STRIPTEASE.

Post by saw » March 5th, 2011, 8:35 am

nice ending...you posit a scene that is familiar, but add a sense of urgency..
If you do not change your direction
you may end up where you are heading

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Re: STRIPTEASE.

Post by dadio » March 5th, 2011, 8:47 am

thank you, Saw. :)

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