Never More.

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dadio
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Never More.

Post by dadio » July 30th, 2011, 5:51 am

Never more
to have her place

her hand
through your chest

to pull out your heart
and let it hang there

dripping blood
or squeeze it

to make those
squishy sounds

as she said
she loved you

most of all.
She died

in another’s arms
with their heart

in her hands
you recall.
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Harlequin
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Re: Never More.

Post by Harlequin » July 30th, 2011, 6:23 pm

"as she said
she loved you

most of all.
She died

in another’s arms "

Ouch... Sorry I couldn't muster a better response than that.

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Re: Never More.

Post by dadio » July 31st, 2011, 4:42 am

"Ouch" pretty well sounds that up. Thank you.lol.

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Re: Never More.

Post by constantine » July 31st, 2011, 8:30 am

nice work - lean and sensitive.

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dadio
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Re: Never More.

Post by dadio » July 31st, 2011, 10:23 am

thank you, my friend. 8)

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Re: Never More.

Post by saw » July 31st, 2011, 10:57 am

a classic tale of mixed messages, the kind that frustrate the mind, the soul.....like the economy that drives it...
If you do not change your direction
you may end up where you are heading

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Re: Never More.

Post by dadio » July 31st, 2011, 3:32 pm

Thank you, Saw.

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Re: Never More.

Post by theirishsea » August 1st, 2011, 12:07 am

Very, very expressive. I liked it though sad and raw the emotion.
The Irish Sea Is Always In Turmoil, Even When Calm.

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Re: Never More.

Post by dadio » August 1st, 2011, 5:11 am

Thank you, theirishea

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