rain fell
the sight told her
that he had no idea
his mother had been raped
that her abuse of him
came from the abuse
she recieved
there were things she saw
sometimes
the roles he had to play
why he had to come
to trying to find his mother
in the streets and sheets
why all that control and anger
led him to self destruct
whenever he met up
with a pece of the truth
those items he accumulated
did not serve him well
the drug dealer rock star
had to be humble
those behaviors do not go away
so easily
holland is no longer an option
but making things right is a clever idea
if love is the motivation
then things can heAL
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reason is over rated, as is logic and common sense-i much prefer the passions of a crazy old woman, cats and dogs and jungle foliage- tropic rain-and a defined sense of who brings the stars up at night and the sun up in the morning---
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sure hope so
thanx
thanx
reason is over rated, as is logic and common sense-i much prefer the passions of a crazy old woman, cats and dogs and jungle foliage- tropic rain-and a defined sense of who brings the stars up at night and the sun up in the morning---
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Two things about this poem. The importanrt one is the psychological insights portrayed here. That is the value of the poem for the reader.
The second---and it is a quibble----edit out the typos. They don't do the poem justice---"steets"----presumably "streets". I am a typo-maker myself but please try to correct them for the poem's sake---unless you want the typos do indicate a state of mind or maybe a social or educational level of the speaker----however, I don't think that applies here.
Good insightful poem though.
The second---and it is a quibble----edit out the typos. They don't do the poem justice---"steets"----presumably "streets". I am a typo-maker myself but please try to correct them for the poem's sake---unless you want the typos do indicate a state of mind or maybe a social or educational level of the speaker----however, I don't think that applies here.
Good insightful poem though.
The Irish Sea Is Always In Turmoil, Even When Calm.
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Forgive me for the lone dissenter here. Yes. Love heals all. However,
I am tired of finding reasons for abuse. There are folks living all over the world who have been horrifically abused but are not abusers. I don't know why some people do some things and others in the same circumstance don't, I don't know why good people do bad things and what makes people bad. As I don't believe in the devil, I'm left with unanswered details.
The last line of your poem IS our saving grace. Much thought went into working out the details.
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I am tired of finding reasons for abuse. There are folks living all over the world who have been horrifically abused but are not abusers. I don't know why some people do some things and others in the same circumstance don't, I don't know why good people do bad things and what makes people bad. As I don't believe in the devil, I'm left with unanswered details.
The last line of your poem IS our saving grace. Much thought went into working out the details.
~A
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if you study people- i do- sociology degree- it is true that most that have been abused-= become abusers-and well typo errors are because i did not have my glasses on- and well- i am going to leave it the way it came out- as it was a miracle in itself- so thank u for your input- really
reason is over rated, as is logic and common sense-i much prefer the passions of a crazy old woman, cats and dogs and jungle foliage- tropic rain-and a defined sense of who brings the stars up at night and the sun up in the morning---
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