behind my eyes

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Kailashana
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behind my eyes

Post by Kailashana » December 23rd, 2011, 7:23 am

"Do we even like each other?"
Echo asked as she twirled
and twisted around my feet.
I was green when I faced the river.
I ripped to shreds dreams that never
came and I came undone.
But you come again and again to steal
my breath and devour my soul.

I listen carefully and exhume the sound.
Earth still clings to me. My bones lie
scattered.


~A

saw
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Re: behind my eyes

Post by saw » December 23rd, 2011, 11:09 am

handled beautifully with kid gloves as an archeologist carefully dusting fragments of newly discovered bones......reminds me of the book, The Lovely Bones, and has the same sadness to contend with.....but it also lays out the fact that there are many unanswered questions in our lives....fine work
If you do not change your direction
you may end up where you are heading

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dadio
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Re: behind my eyes

Post by dadio » December 23rd, 2011, 4:42 pm

this has the depth lacking in much Western poetry. 8)

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Re: behind my eyes

Post by goldenmyst » December 25th, 2011, 12:56 pm

A tentative romantic encounter word painted into art. Exquisite.

John

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