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beginings

Post by Shem » June 14th, 2012, 4:35 am

The end has come,
And I’ve not drunk enough to think about it.
The end has come,
It was there all along though still a surprise.
The end has come,
It was prophesized in the beginning.
Though I was blind,
Though I was willing.
Willingly blind.
The way all love begins.
With deceit
In darkness
And most of all hope.
Hope that THIS time you are wrong.
It’s NOT what is seems.
But it is.
It always is.
Hear your rationales, but listen to your heart.
Therein lies the truth.
And truth destroys.
Last edited by Shem on July 12th, 2012, 12:24 pm, edited 1 time in total.
Leave the letter that never begins to go find the latter that ever comes to end, written in smoke and blurred by mist and signed of solitude, sealed of night.
-James Joyce

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Re: beginings

Post by Shem » June 14th, 2012, 4:38 am

Therein LAYS the truth? I think I like lies better. Being lied to was the seed after all. Thoughts? In this weak of a poem dose it even matter?
Leave the letter that never begins to go find the latter that ever comes to end, written in smoke and blurred by mist and signed of solitude, sealed of night.
-James Joyce

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Re: beginings

Post by judih » June 14th, 2012, 11:21 pm

definitely 'lies'

do it, shem

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Re: beginings

Post by Christopher T. George » June 15th, 2012, 10:19 am

Hello Shem

A worthwhile look at human existence and the fate that we all face. Well done.

One tiny nit. In line 2, I would make it more simply "And I’ve not drunk enough to think about it." Rather than "drunken".

Good luck with this, Shem.

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Re: beginings

Post by creativesoul » June 15th, 2012, 4:13 pm

i have felt feelings like this- nice-
reason is over rated, as is logic and common sense-i much prefer the passions of a crazy old woman, cats and dogs and jungle foliage- tropic rain-and a defined sense of who brings the stars up at night and the sun up in the morning---

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Re: beginings

Post by Shem » June 15th, 2012, 10:31 pm

Thanks all, yes Chris I totally agree and actually saaved it that way .
Leave the letter that never begins to go find the latter that ever comes to end, written in smoke and blurred by mist and signed of solitude, sealed of night.
-James Joyce

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