gun stomach

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the mingo
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gun stomach

Post by the mingo » February 19th, 2013, 10:49 am

with large guns the words come
equal in existence
with simples & sisters & elastic amusements
who are we but playgrounds for them
the music has muscle and driving by we drop in
the women with their animal pockets,
make a slight gypsy adjustment
to the earth where no army
can make argument
nor first fish make math
it is a fertile station
with huge steam pipes
running beneath
and the tall water birds of history
avoid any behavior
that does not help
something into their stomachs
Doll, you may have found a place of rest but I'm still on the trail.

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constantine
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Re: gun stomach

Post by constantine » February 19th, 2013, 12:06 pm

decent! i particularly like the end sequence, but the whole thing is fresh and has substance.

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Re: gun stomach

Post by saw » February 20th, 2013, 6:35 pm

highly original with ample mystery octane to compel the reader to dig in....
If you do not change your direction
you may end up where you are heading

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Re: gun stomach

Post by the mingo » February 21st, 2013, 11:28 am

thx gentleman - i appreciate it
Doll, you may have found a place of rest but I'm still on the trail.

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