FEEL THE NEED.

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dadio
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FEEL THE NEED.

Post by dadio » December 13th, 2013, 4:36 am

And choir practice is over
and you and the others
leave by the vestry door
and look at the night sky

few stars
bright moon
and she says
wait a while

and so you wait
while the others
move off
towards the cars

or for the long walk
down the drive
from the church
and you see her there

in the moonlight
and she is standing
by one of the graves
and you go to her

and she draws you
to her and you kiss
and the warm lips
are on yours

and she has
her arms around you
and you smell
her scent

and feel her there
her body close
to yours
her hands touching

and her lips
and you touch her
and sense her
and it's as if

time has stopped
and nothing else
is in the world
except you and she

and the moonlight
and stars
and that slight wind
you sense

and her fingers
through your hair
and your hand
feeling along

her butt
and warmth
and no thoughts
no philosophy

no music
none of that stuff
just you and she there
and the kissing

and touching
and time moving
but you both unaware
that some other guy

would have her
and marry her
and that cancer
would take her off

into its deadly grasp
and there was moonlight
and stars
and lips

and kissing
and she saying
she loved you
and you saying words

that floated there
bird-like flapping
and her lips
soft as cotton

and her tongue
touching yours
entering
and sensing

and O boy
that was hot
and love
and only

in the dark hours
when her shadow
lingers nearby
do you see

that time
and feel
the need
to cry.
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the mingo
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Re: FEEL THE NEED.

Post by the mingo » December 14th, 2013, 8:34 am

. . . time has stopped
and nothing else
is in the world
except you and she . . .

8) 8)
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Re: FEEL THE NEED.

Post by theirishsea » December 14th, 2013, 11:12 am

I love this----romantic but beautifully so. Maybe towards the end---just a few too many words----and I say that only because otherwise I love this poem. I think the poem transports the reader into that joyous wonderful night---and beyond.
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dadio
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Re: FEEL THE NEED.

Post by dadio » December 14th, 2013, 7:17 pm

Thank you, the mingo & irish

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