ALICE'S LOVE.

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dadio
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ALICE'S LOVE.

Post by dadio » December 11th, 2013, 5:14 pm

Alice liked the soft
voice of her mother,
the telling of stories
as she fell into sleep.

She liked it when her
mother hugged her
tight and kissed her
goodnight. Her father

seldom came to story
tell or hug or kiss or
such; seemed it was
too much. His voice

was deep and harsh
as winds, his eyes
dark and shark like,
peering without those

feelings of love or
want or admittance
into his realm of deep
concern, cared neither

if she drowned nor
burned nor if in her
dark hours she counted
unhappiness on her

fingers and toes; he
was her father, but
one of those. She liked
to hug and kiss her

doll, poor substitute
for a father's love,
it sitting there in hers
arms unblinking and

smile-less as her father
did; feelings not there
or if so, well hid. Alice
kissed her mother's brow,

her arms, her hands,
her fingers, too, what
was a deep sad fatherless
or seemingly so, girl to do

to bridge the space or gap,
but sleep in her mother's lap
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theirishsea
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Re: ALICE'S LOVE.

Post by theirishsea » December 14th, 2013, 11:19 am

Your poems always touch the heart in some way and this does. The poem was written after viewing the painting or was the painting chosen after the poem was written. I suspect the first situation because of the mention of the doll but just wondering.

One of your qualities as a writer that I like is that you capture innocence and transmit its feelings so well.

Have you written a companion piece from the father's point of view? That could be interesting.
The Irish Sea Is Always In Turmoil, Even When Calm.

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Re: ALICE'S LOVE.

Post by dadio » December 14th, 2013, 7:16 pm

Thank you, Irish. Yes, I was inspired by the painting. An interesting idea about the father.

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