The Awkward Poem

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edsiejka
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The Awkward Poem

Post by edsiejka » February 14th, 2014, 1:11 pm

The Awkward Poem



By Edmund Siejka



A high school English teacher
Issues a challenge
Her class
Is to write a poem.

Reading a student’s poem
Her experienced eye
Searches for
Imagery
Metaphor
Tone
Point of view
Ultimately the student’s poem
Is graded a gentleman’s C.

Somewhat surprised
The student admits his shortcomings
Indicating that poetry is a lot like writing
Disappointed
The teacher
Doesn’t know whether to laugh or cry.

Coming home that night on a crowded train
The teacher passes up a seat
Letting an exhausted looking woman
Sit down
Thankful
For this simple courtesy
Brief smiles are exchanged
Strangers from two different worlds.

The teacher notices the smell of disinfectant
Hovering over the woman
Thick fingers holding tightly to her purse
The woman
Begins an animated conversation
With two other women
Broken English
Graceful hand movements
Words interrupted with laughter.

From what the teacher hears
She believes the women
Are cleaning ladies
The little people who clean the bathrooms
Vacuum carpeted hallways
Empty the trash
From windowed offices
High above the New York skyline.

The words ‘poetry is a lot like writing’
Linger in the teacher’s memory
One thing she is sure of
The ladies know of life
After years of
Hard work for little pay
Hungry children
Angry husbands
Absentee landlords.

The train stops
Momentarily the ladies collect
In a small group
On the empty train platform
Suddenly there is no more talking
In the awkward silence
Each of the ladies turn
Toward the direction
Of a place they call home.

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stilltrucking
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Re: The Awkward Poem

Post by stilltrucking » February 14th, 2014, 7:11 pm

Nice work. 8)


You mean poetry is not a lot like writing? :wink:
I kind of thought poetry it is more like bleeding.

The blood jet is poetry,
There is no stopping it

Kindness, S.Plath

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dadio
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Re: The Awkward Poem

Post by dadio » February 16th, 2014, 4:12 am

Good informative poem. 8)

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