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the mingo
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when I left

Post by the mingo » April 11th, 2014, 8:39 pm

when I left
the lions were still in the woods
& the birds yet in the trees
when I came back
the lions had turned to stone
& cast stone shadows
the birds had also stopped moving
some in the trees
others in midair
it was that way for the longest time
then you died
that was when the birds everywhere
completely disappeared
Doll, you may have found a place of rest but I'm still on the trail.

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Re: when I left

Post by stilltrucking » April 11th, 2014, 9:27 pm

stoned 8)

I almost forgot about the time I turned to marble
I would hardly notice that I am a thing called alive
if not for pure poetry
thank you

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Re: when I left

Post by mtmynd » April 11th, 2014, 10:33 pm

when the birds disappear it's a sign to seek them out. life is dismal without them.

excellent imaginative piece, el mingo... put it on the biggest billboard in the state.
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Re: when I left

Post by still.trucking » April 11th, 2014, 10:35 pm

it seems presumptions to me, for me to comment on a poem

but if I was a poet I would
probably quote dadio
and say
"good capture"
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Re: when I left

Post by judih » April 11th, 2014, 11:55 pm

beautifully put, the mingo

outer slams inner in the face
gotta shake the perception

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Re: when I left

Post by the mingo » April 12th, 2014, 8:31 am

Jack - thank you for both 8) 8)

Cecil - if I followed your kind suggestion & put that on a billboard here in the great state of Yew Nork the rent would cost me (plus TAX) more than I'll ever be worth - thx 8) 8)

judih - Thx - 8) 8)
Doll, you may have found a place of rest but I'm still on the trail.

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Re: when I left

Post by mtmynd » April 14th, 2014, 2:28 pm

el mingo: "if I followed your kind suggestion & put that on a billboard here..."

on the bottom left corner, in contrasting colors, the following -
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Kindly send contributions for this installation made out to

El Mingo - Yew Nork

... and keep your eye out and your mind open for more of my

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Re: when I left

Post by Atehequa » April 15th, 2014, 5:10 am

Enjoyable reading

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Re: when I left

Post by the mingo » April 15th, 2014, 10:01 am

Thx Cec - I could use the cash but the rest of it would ruin the time I have carved out for riding my bike 8)
Doll, you may have found a place of rest but I'm still on the trail.

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Re: when I left

Post by the mingo » April 15th, 2014, 10:02 am

Thx Atehequa - 8)
Doll, you may have found a place of rest but I'm still on the trail.

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Re: when I left

Post by mtmynd » April 15th, 2014, 2:02 pm

the mingo wrote:Thx Cec - I could use the cash but the rest of it would ruin the time I have carved out for riding my bike 8)
Well then, el mingo, if that's the case. I fully understand! we could all use cash around here but we also value our independence more than dinero. I certainly do.

Hey, I had a good time playing around with ya' amigo... because i got time. no money but time up the kazoo! :lol:

i'll be lookin' out for some more of your writes.
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