three going on four

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revolutionR
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three going on four

Post by revolutionR » August 6th, 2014, 1:41 am

I think the ocean was my real first memory
actually the desert was but the desert is an ocean too
my mother took me for long walks along the shore
we lived on a hill overlooking the pacific blue water
we lived in a apartment building with paper thin walls
or at least the bathroom was because I had talks
through the bathroom wall with the man next door
I was three years old going on four, i got naked
with two girls one day that lived just up the hill
I told my dad, and he said that it was nasty
I did not know what nasty meant, so i guess he smiled
we did not live on the hill overlooking the sea very long
but i never forgot the two little girls i played doctor with
that hugely bright cobalt sky day that lasted for eternity
when you are three going on four and you are naked and nasty
with two cute little girls that probably grew up to be stone foxes
my mother was very pretty when i was three, she looked like
a Hollywood movie star, or at least that is what my memory says
I loved our walks together down on the pier with the star fish
my dad was a good looking young man in dark rim glasses
he worked at a local aircraft factory, and the future seemed sure

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Re: three going on four

Post by dadio » August 7th, 2014, 2:31 am

Done well, but leaving us wanting to know more, but that is how it should be left wondering. Classic.

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Re: three going on four

Post by creativesoul » August 7th, 2014, 1:33 pm

i liked this ---- and well- at 3 or 4 it is hard to 'know more' and i bet tey did grow up to e twin hookers somewhere raking in the dough- sounds fun to me-
we had a 'playboy club'
my mother was a movie star-
boring bitches from hell- actresse- change identities like underwear- better be prepared
reason is over rated, as is logic and common sense-i much prefer the passions of a crazy old woman, cats and dogs and jungle foliage- tropic rain-and a defined sense of who brings the stars up at night and the sun up in the morning---

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Re: three going on four

Post by revolutionR » August 7th, 2014, 2:18 pm

it's not so much what is said

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Post by creativesoul » August 10th, 2014, 12:56 pm

i re-read this- i love it- mystery is groovy baby :idea:
reason is over rated, as is logic and common sense-i much prefer the passions of a crazy old woman, cats and dogs and jungle foliage- tropic rain-and a defined sense of who brings the stars up at night and the sun up in the morning---

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Re: three going on four

Post by revolutionR » August 10th, 2014, 4:43 pm

groovy baby, is why I started writing poetry in the first place.

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Re: three going on four

Post by creativesoul » August 10th, 2014, 6:58 pm

like that- reasons why we are creative- to salvage what is meta morphis :arrow:
reason is over rated, as is logic and common sense-i much prefer the passions of a crazy old woman, cats and dogs and jungle foliage- tropic rain-and a defined sense of who brings the stars up at night and the sun up in the morning---

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