if only all the other lines had been as true

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saw
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if only all the other lines had been as true

Post by saw » August 7th, 2014, 3:15 pm

I remember those days
like the curvature of her exquisite back
the way it set the mood
the streamed-line of intoxication

I could always depend on it,
when she stood in front of the mirror
let her cotton blouse slide off her shoulders
fall to the floor

it never wavered
always curled up from the base of her spine
following the same meridian
disappearing into the chiseled muscles

carved from her days rowing
that blue canoe she loved so much,
that line up her back was the one constant
I could always rely on

if only all the other lines
had been as true
If you do not change your direction
you may end up where you are heading

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Re: if only all the other lines had been as true

Post by creativesoul » August 7th, 2014, 3:53 pm

sweet
reason is over rated, as is logic and common sense-i much prefer the passions of a crazy old woman, cats and dogs and jungle foliage- tropic rain-and a defined sense of who brings the stars up at night and the sun up in the morning---

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Re: if only all the other lines had been as true

Post by the mingo » August 7th, 2014, 5:06 pm

got a few fault lines of my own but they didn't keep me from enjoying this - thx saw - 8)
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Re: if only all the other lines had been as true

Post by whoaisme » August 7th, 2014, 5:53 pm

even tho you began with those lines, the conclusion was unexpected. caught me off guard cuz it seemed to change the direction completely. nice one. 8)
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Re: if only all the other lines had been as true

Post by mnaz » August 8th, 2014, 12:25 pm

yes, that meridian ...

very effective visuals.

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