make believe pretend

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sonofthesun
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make believe pretend

Post by sonofthesun » December 14th, 2018, 3:32 am

she came to me
with him
who had hit her
asking me to give in
sorry
not going to happen
it doesnt work that way
There is no empty space

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Re: make believe pretend

Post by stilltrucking » December 14th, 2018, 9:10 pm

she came to me
with him . . .



only 28 words in your poem including the title
you used them well!!!

Thank you for the poem

I was young once
now I am old
I keep hoping for a chance at one more broken heart. :( 8)

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Re: make believe pretend

Post by sonofthesun » December 31st, 2018, 5:40 am

Not sure what it is, but I enjoy using as few of words as possible. Never too late for another broken heart, that is what makes life worth living. Each sunrise has a new tale.
There is no empty space

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Re: make believe pretend

Post by theirishsea » January 1st, 2019, 6:57 pm

Certain things are not forgiven easily----domestic violence is surely one of them. Too many women (mostly) are killed or really hurt by some guy who can't control his worst instincts. It just isn't right.
The Irish Sea Is Always In Turmoil, Even When Calm.

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Re: make believe pretend

Post by creativesoul » January 2nd, 2019, 12:55 am

It destroyed me for 4 years afterwards
reason is over rated, as is logic and common sense-i much prefer the passions of a crazy old woman, cats and dogs and jungle foliage- tropic rain-and a defined sense of who brings the stars up at night and the sun up in the morning---

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