[does the length of a poem bore the reader...?]

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[does the length of a poem bore the reader...?]

Post by mtmynd » October 13th, 2020, 1:46 am

[... or does the writer grow bored with his lengthy words spew?]

Makeshift Shaft of Rainbow Delirium

three quarters spilled
across time/space tables,
the echo of more persists
as five fulfillments cry
tears of greed rolling west
as the eye-spy game continues

double halves reaching fullness
as magic marker smells ripen
spelling words in shadows
splayed across bleached papers
vivid in their burdened virginity

five and dimes adding up junk
reaching for the treetops
covering reality in needles
shooting joylost into veins
running freely and unconditioned
the body highways not high enough

one dollar holler fifty
the remote chance of litter
turning into lottery gains
into 144 grains of loss raining
thru 3 hourglass arms squeezing
sixteen lemons onto bouquets
sniffing the rear ends of dogs
lost in backstreets without bones

turn it-burn it-churn it
and life still persists
against grains of barley
superstitious with mirrors
staring back at one ego
laser melting ten dreams
into seven floods of despair

where are the 12 choices
that were given freely
when adolescence ruled?
where are the nine freedoms
guaranteed by people
that fought til death
so poems would shoot
the feet of ignorance
out from under stupidity?

diamond encrusted fool
imaging your needs
thru prisms of coal
polished with rags
of serendipity tripped
lost in realms of make-believe

mindquake the vestibules
the joke tumbles ceaselessly
leaving the source to create
just one more time for fantasy
to bloom as a tease to please

~treasure hunts greed
~treasure hunts greed
~treasure hunts greed

((triphalia decides the ending))

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Cecil B. Lee
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Re: [does the length of a poem bore the reader...?]

Post by saw » October 16th, 2020, 9:16 am

I trust in the process myself
I may question where the words come from at times
but rarely edit having this inexplicable responsibility
i feel
to pass them along
the poet as scribe....the poet as intermediary
of course I could be totally full of shit
I could be just as plausibly delusional
when the words come rapid fire from out of the blue
it does seem like I'm tapping into something
If you do not change your direction
you may end up where you are heading

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Re: [does the length of a poem bore the reader...?]

Post by mtmynd » October 16th, 2020, 6:43 pm

Re: "when the words come rapid fire from out of the blue
it does seem like I'm tapping into something"

In those rare times, I feel a great rush coursing thru my body followed by an earned exhaustion.

TY! :)
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Re: [does the length of a poem bore the reader...?]

Post by creativesoul » October 17th, 2020, 1:19 am

It would seem almost as if.. possessed by an energy
A deep need to let the inside world collide
With the skies of the present
The fingers ; tapping in a frantic desire to tap it out
Wrestle that idea into the ground

Perhaps .. the descriptions are too long..
in other words
Her dress the lace the fingers the quiver
Is trembling into boredom

Apathy : too far away from the subject
The crumble of the old cookie on the plate
Words come from the chocolate
It’s no longer a mystery
Who is eating what ??? or what is eating you? Words
Roll off the fingers into the other world
Behind the looking glass
reason is over rated, as is logic and common sense-i much prefer the passions of a crazy old woman, cats and dogs and jungle foliage- tropic rain-and a defined sense of who brings the stars up at night and the sun up in the morning---

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Re: [does the length of a poem bore the reader...?]

Post by mtmynd » October 17th, 2020, 9:42 am

Re: "Who is eating what ??? or what is eating you? Words
Roll off the fingers into the other world
Behind the looking glass."

Undo the the barriers... open the possibilities
the world need not wait but our short lives do.

Gracias, CS. :)
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Re: [does the length of a poem bore the reader...?]

Post by saw » October 17th, 2020, 11:01 am

i believe in the collective consciousness
that when we are in tune we get to enter this space
it is not inside our head, brain, mind but rather
a place outside those concepts......space ?
the final frontier ?
words are inadequate to express the sensations
and what goes on inside this cornucopia of ancient thought
blended with contemporary thought , this mixing bowl
of ides, words, phrases, connections to new places
and I know many people that have not had that experience
and when I try to explain to those who are curious, perhaps
even doubtful, they stare as if i have three heads
and maybe have gone around the bend as some say, yet
nevertheless i know the experiences far to well to be dissuaded
If you do not change your direction
you may end up where you are heading

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Re: [does the length of a poem bore the reader...?]

Post by mtmynd » October 17th, 2020, 3:21 pm

Re: "I know many people that have not had that experience
and when I try to explain to those who are curious, perhaps
even doubtful, they stare as if i have three heads
and maybe have gone around the bend as some say, yet
nevertheless i know the experiences far to well to be dissuaded."

Ditto, amigo. must I say more..? ;)
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