8:20 a.m.
8:20 a.m.
. . . a graceful answer from daughter to fireman
is to let the station hands tend the cobwebs
while those suffering enlarged prostates plant trees around the nation & pitch their tents
far from the vulgar flat oceans,
gloves happen & the float value of old-fashioned ornamental dolls
decorates the grotesque authority of memory
buried short or buried long these things go off in all directions
- we throw the dead dry bats on the fire, finger the coast until it moans,
and no longer look into tomorrow where all debts will be considered settled
and the milk no longer able to drive us mad.
is to let the station hands tend the cobwebs
while those suffering enlarged prostates plant trees around the nation & pitch their tents
far from the vulgar flat oceans,
gloves happen & the float value of old-fashioned ornamental dolls
decorates the grotesque authority of memory
buried short or buried long these things go off in all directions
- we throw the dead dry bats on the fire, finger the coast until it moans,
and no longer look into tomorrow where all debts will be considered settled
and the milk no longer able to drive us mad.
Doll, you may have found a place of rest but I'm still on the trail.
Re: 8:20 a.m.
El Mingo, allow me to congratulate you on this piece of writing - excellent!
I needn't repeat what you,ve written since you yourself know and should know the read so well stated.
I needn't repeat what you,ve written since you yourself know and should know the read so well stated.
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Re: 8:20 a.m.
Thx,Cecil - I don't write much these days but I had my Covid shot from the VA yesterday and it seems to have knocked a couple of things loose, making me feel snakey around the edges Thx for your read & comment - I appreciate it
Doll, you may have found a place of rest but I'm still on the trail.
Re: 8:20 a.m.
nice stream of consciousness....i always feel good when the stream is rushing down the the side of my head....
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Re: 8:20 a.m.
i recorded, and then re-recorded. I think it could benefit from a faster pace, a male voice. Just sayin'
Re: 8:20 a.m.
nice job judih...i miss going out tp hear spoken word...poetry readings at a local book store....the poetry comes alive,,,
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Yeah. And the energy of speaking to an audience - well, sure beats zoom readings, or speaking into a mic in front of a wall of drawings.
Soon, one day soon, there'll be so many open mics, our calendar will demand time off.
Re: 8:20 a.m.
Well, here's my 3rd take (with some pauses and umms and fluffs removed) - 51 seconds to your 68, abt 33% faster.
I dunno, I read some of my 'ku at a slam once & my hands & voice were shaking so badly they made the audience even more uncomfortable than I was! Give me a mic in an isolation booth any day.....
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Re: 8:20 a.m.
good job sasha !
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yes, sasha!
On a roll!
About speaking in public - I've always felt fine doing it, since public school. I guess, a lucky skill i picked up from some DNA offering me some true enjoyment
On a roll!
About speaking in public - I've always felt fine doing it, since public school. I guess, a lucky skill i picked up from some DNA offering me some true enjoyment
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Holy MP3's ! You guys went nuts! What a surprise to hear these! I thank both judih and sasha for their creative efforts - I never hear my own stuff except in my own head while writing and it does not compare - Thank you both -
... and thx saw, for your read & comment - I appreciate it
... and thx saw, for your read & comment - I appreciate it
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s/he who writes and posts is fair game for the MP3 surprise visitthe mingo wrote: ↑April 13th, 2021, 5:44 pmHoly MP3's ! You guys went nuts! What a surprise to hear these! I thank both judih and sasha for their creative efforts - I never hear my own stuff except in my own head while writing and it does not compare - Thank you both -
... and thx saw, for your read & comment - I appreciate it
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I'll make a notes/he who writes and posts is fair game for the MP3 surprise visit
Doll, you may have found a place of rest but I'm still on the trail.
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