I Can't Win (Mindy)

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Ann Bingham
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I Can't Win (Mindy)

Post by Ann Bingham » February 20th, 2006, 1:30 pm

This is that
You yell
No
That this.

White stuff all around
You muffle
NO
Tis all black.

Who is it?
None ya.
Oh him
not that one.

And the rainbows laugh
and the raindrops
are all crytal,
Beautiful arn't they.:?

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Post by iblieve » February 20th, 2006, 4:34 pm

mental confusion abounds. Left me thinking about crystal dazes chopped too fine and liquefied Excellent trip my friend.
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Post by Ann Bingham » February 20th, 2006, 8:07 pm

:lol:

thank you. Though at the time I was just rambling. :oops:

love lots
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Post by stilltrucking » February 21st, 2006, 2:45 pm

mindy not dated is this an old piece from five years ago?

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Post by Ann Bingham » February 21st, 2006, 3:25 pm

No, just Mindy's voice. Child like. She's not created here yet.

At the time posted is close to time written.

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Post by ButtercupNutSwirlz » February 23rd, 2006, 2:37 pm

Cute write Ann. I love conversational poems. Alot of mine are in that vein. I guess I have alot to say to myself.

Couple of misspells tho that you might want to fix, unless they were intentional. Yes, I'm abit of a nitpick. crystal is missing her s and aren't is missing her e.

I like your choice of the word "muffle", fits nice.

Thanks for the read.

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Post by Ann Bingham » February 23rd, 2006, 2:46 pm

Thanks Buttercup (like the name).

Think faster then can type sometimes. Guess I should have used spell check.

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