centered on a bottle of Châteauneuf-du-Pape

[joel]

Reflected
to waste in blindness—
wasted it’s nonetheless
epiphany
of what would be
if eye turned to eyes beholding.

Bottle of Châteauneuf-du-Pape—
whore expensive. The loneliness
is more than enough to justify payment
for drinks and joys in solitude;
glazed eyes lose their eyes beholding.

And there, with the blindness and the loneliness and whoring—
could you be reflected
and missed?

[mousey1]

Excellent!

To raise a small point, I would only like to see "it's" written out fully as in, "wasted it is nonetheless". Otherwise, perfect to this mind's eye.

[joel]

i agree with the visual element of writing out "it is"...but when it is spoken, i like the ambiguity of "it's" and "its". because i'm anal retentive i suppose.

thanks for the comments! it is helpful!

[Ann Bingham]

like how the eyes turn glazed and lose their 'spark'

something like drinking and sleeping someone out of your system, it doesn't work.


love lots

[Totenkopf]

Bottle of Châteauneuf-du-Pape—
whore expensive. The loneliness
is more than enough to justify payment
for drinks and joys in solitude;
glazed eyes lose their eyes beholding.

One of your better pieces, methinx