Bitter Deep

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~K
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Bitter Deep

Post by ~K » September 2nd, 2006, 7:15 pm

you are
the mess that
I am covered in
hip bitter
deep sweet

I drown
in shallow wells

with expectations
of saving you

from yourself

I am the mess
that you are
covered in

we are liquid sin
a lucid disbelievers
dream of butterflies
& hurricanes

we think
& so we sink
into the echo
like we belong there

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abstroint
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Post by abstroint » September 3rd, 2006, 11:01 am

Missing bricks
I crumbled easily
Forgive me

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stilltrucking
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Post by stilltrucking » September 6th, 2006, 9:35 pm

That was beautiful
just a comment
don't mean nothing
but thank you both for posting that.

one edit
"missing bricks"
cracks me up
I been thinking about sentence structure that crumbles for want of punctuation. How words bounce around on a text based communtiy.
interests me.
dam I edited and rambled

just say hijack :oops:

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mnaz
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Post by mnaz » September 7th, 2006, 1:51 am

I am a mess,
part of a larger mess,
and it's always been such a mess.

I had no idea I could use the word 'mess'
in three straight sentences
and feel better at the end.

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