Spring sweet Spree (ugly)

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Spring sweet Spree (ugly)

Post by Totenkopf » April 18th, 2007, 9:10 pm

Spree with me, into glorious light
luciferic, ketchup spatter mannequins--
we will mangle motorways and malls,
lovely coeds or preppy cocksucker
decorating walls at Alma Mortis:
sweet lovers love the spray,
Charlie Whitman our patron saint
Natural Born Killers cinematic ode
and cause. (Not really, tho'.
Just another gunsel jerk -off).
Poesy could not
tell it, dahling, no, nova bois
barely glimpse the royal road,
Bela Kun highway, beckoning
to the becomingness of Kix.
To die in a hail of pig fire,
dancing on the news,
botoxed snatch quivering
at the latest Dillinger of cyberspace.
Whatever. Meet you
at Cafe Malebolgia

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Post by Doreen Peri » April 18th, 2007, 9:27 pm

Ugly is right.

This is totally ugly.

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Post by Totenkopf » April 18th, 2007, 9:31 pm

It's not "me", DP. About inner demons and madness (not my own really)--a response, however humble, to the ugliness of the Virginia thing. Ever hear of Browning? He wrote monologues, not really about "him." Sort of Browning-lite (with some Capote, not that I admire that freak that much). Not really fleshed out poem---Just a reflection . Sry.

And note reference to Dante's Malebolgia: ah am not one for old time religion , but on occasion one might speculate whether freaks such as the virginia shooter are on the way down the Hades elevator.................

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Post by Doreen Peri » April 18th, 2007, 10:32 pm

No offense or anything but if you are playing the role, using the "voice" of the mentally ill mass murderer, OK, but it just isn't my cuppa tea when it comes to poetry or any literature for that matter.

It seems to glorify it. I hate glorification of violent acts.

I'm sure you didn't mean it that way 'cause otherwise you wouldn't have posted it here, knowing how sensitive everyone is to what happened the other day.

Nobody ... and I mean nobody... wants to read anything that glorifies the murders. You couldn't have possibly meant it that way so if I read it wrong, my apologies.

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Post by Totenkopf » April 18th, 2007, 10:41 pm

NO I am not glorifying the murders; it was a heinous, horrible act, obviously. My apologies if it seemed that way. Really, I am in favor of moderate gun control. Yet, all humans have a sort of inner demon, whether he (or she) comes to light or not: as Sartre said, there is "the dizziness of freedom" that humans experience as well. Society tends to sort of dismiss that pathological instinct, until it explodes like it did yesterday. Really I believe that we are surrounded by human beasts, everywhere.........Its' like Night of the Living Dead, playing indefinitely

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Post by Doreen Peri » April 18th, 2007, 10:57 pm

I knew I read it wrong. You couldn't have been doing that!

It must have been my own inner demon or better said... my own fears... perceiving what I read incorrectly.

Maybe it was the "sweet" in the title. Or some of the verbiage in the piece which refers to coeds "decorating walls" and the words "spatter" and "love the spray."

It was just my perception being altered by my own fears and the vivid imagery I have in my mind imagining I was there, highlighted by listening to the descriptions of the eye witnesses who survived... along with memories of extremely violent scenes in movies I've seen.

God I hate violence in films. Used to be violence was IMPLIED, not shown. That was artistic. Blatant violence, bloodbaths in film... ugh... not for me! I don't want to see that! Gratuitously violent scenes in films or literature... ugh! Unnecessary.

Not that violence is not a part of life. Obviously it is! We have all just witnessed (though many of us from afar, it feels like I was there) some of the worst of it. It's how it's portrayed in works of art which make it work better and be more palatable.

I've been waiting until my own inspiration hit me to write a piece about this. It has to come out eventually. I'm sure I'll be angry with myself when I read my own words and hear the violence in them but it will have to be said.

Every day horrific violence happens. When are we going to stop it? And how? People are murdered in wars ... innocent citizens... every damn day.

It's just so sickening, Mr. T.

I weep for our world.

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Post by stilltrucking » April 19th, 2007, 11:01 am

Good luck Doreen
I have surrendered to fear
I embrace it

And my greatest fear is language
Jota is right
"language is a bitch with an ice pick."

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Post by Totenkopf » April 19th, 2007, 11:20 am

Thanks for interesting comment, Mizz DP.

God I hate violence in films. Used to be violence was IMPLIED, not shown. That was artistic. Blatant violence, bloodbaths in film... ugh... not for me! I don't want to see that! Gratuitously violent scenes in films or literature... ugh! Unnecessary.
This perspective is understandable, but we do not completely agree. IN some ways, Americuns are shielded from real violence: yes they are given the Peckinpah-Tarentino pop pulp violence (Tarentino sux tho' in my estimation): they are not given the real experience of battles---a napalm attack, or Hiroshima, or rockets blasting apart a city, nuke-armed supercarriers sitting out in the harbor etc.. And consumers are generally not exposed to the real violence of crime, organized or not, or the horrors of murderers and sadists. TV for instance is, except for the "news" a happy place: fun sexy young people, chatting, flirting. It's not grunts pinned down in a firefight. There are the cop shows, Law and Order, or mafia fantasy--Sopranos, etc. but I think they are mostly BS. Oliver Stone 's movies---such as Natural Born Killers--- provide some hints into the psyche of the psychopath. So consider, bitteschoen, the above rant a miniature Stone flick (Poet I am not anyway, but prose spewer. But it says creative writing, not poesia, on banner, raht).

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Post by stilltrucking » April 19th, 2007, 11:20 am

Sweet poem totenputz
amazing how you always seem to caputure what I am feeling
right this minute

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Post by Totenkopf » April 19th, 2007, 11:22 am

Danke, but I asked that you not post on my threads, ST. Verstehen Zee? Gut.

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Post by stilltrucking » April 19th, 2007, 11:24 am

ask me again.

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Post by Totenkopf » April 19th, 2007, 11:33 am

I'm not asking ewe sh***t, clown. I'm telling you.

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Post by stilltrucking » April 19th, 2007, 11:39 am

I wish I could help you

But right now I am face to face with that demon myself

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Post by Totenkopf » April 19th, 2007, 11:41 am

Dude , I don't need your help, at all. Just don't post on my threads, Mr. 6977. Or................

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Post by stilltrucking » April 19th, 2007, 11:53 am

Hard not to post to you

Too late now

The cat's out of the bag
The genji out of the bottle
the bullets have flown the coop
the blood has spattered
sweet revenge
and a preemptive fuck

we all need one every once in a while

This ain't about me and you dude

this is about inner demons

and the words that bleed into this text box

and it don't mean nothing

and it means everything

keep on trucking
keep on writting

don't worry about me
I'll be out of here anyday now.

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