AM radio

[joel]

You touch me like I’m AM radio
with gentle nuanced finger-taps. You swerve
to catch advice or car talk, scratchy jazz
or Spanish-language lovesongs like a friend
on distant naked roads for company—
you hunt to catch my lovesongs clear for you.
You push me and you gamble clarity
but fear you’ll pass the fragile parity
between us. Tune me to your wavelength, to
your soundscape, to whatever frequency
allows us conversation; let me bend
to resonate because I love you as
you don’t believe you love deserve—
don’t lose me in the static radio.

[mnaz]

.... You swerve to catch advice or car talk, scratchy jazz
or Spanish-language lovesongs like a friend on distant naked roads for company—

yes... seems like I've been there. excellent.

tuning, retuning, and static... building blocks of the continuous road...

[eugeneherman]

at least u ain't cryin' in the rain, pour poor rain, you don't steal when u feel, honesty ain't a gift , itz a career move!

[mousey1]

in the static I heard the noise of regret
I twiddled the knob
tried to tune re-tune
fidget
but static it is
and static I'll always get

[Lightning Rod]

"you don’t believe you love deserve"

did you mean, "you don't believe your love deserves."

?
didn't know if it was a typo
you are usually so meticulous about the subjects of tense and meter

I know this is not a critique forum, but I couldn't help but notice

[Lightning Rod]

and Gene

I have to say that you are one of the most honest thieves that I know

When the going gets weird, the weird turn pro

Hunter Thompson

To live outside the law you must be honest
--Dylan

[mousey1]

I believe, L Rod, that he, as in joel, means it just as he sayeth it!

say it with me now...

"you don't believe you love...deserve"

do you see?

it sounds purr fect.

[mousey1]

and I think this is a critique forum

you just better stand ready with kevlar hat and vest

'cause it can get warm

if you know what I mean

if you can't stand the heat then get your fuckin' critique out of my poem...um...or vice versa!





edit: but I've been wrong be forum.

[Lightning Rod]

It could be a matter of punctuation
that's when you need to hear it from the lips of the poet
just to be sure
be sure

[Lightning Rod]

I donno, mousey

that wasn't really critique, it was just a friendly suggestion

doreen has gotten me out of the habit of offering critique

I've traded in my Kevlar for Dragon Skin

[mousey1]

Well, don't mind me
I'm just goofin'
you know,
sometimes think I'm being clever
and it often gets the better of me

I wasn't accusin' you of critiquin'
no sirree
I was just sayin'
I think critiquing in general
on this forum
is okey dokey

*shuffles off to Baltimore tongue imbedded half way in cheek*

Dragon skin eh? I got me some of that.

[Arcadia]

sweet poem!
and sorry... in this building it´s impossible to try to sintonize an AM radio!!!. Re-transmit in FM and I´ll try!!

[joel]

First up, thanks for supportive comments! Second off, I'm always up for critique...my training's in geology, counseling and theology--I'm a learner lookin' for teachers. Always.

let me bend
to resonate because I love you as
you don’t believe you love deserve

I meant it as: let me bend [myself] to resonate because I love you [in ways in which] you don't believe you deserve [to receive] love.

And I live in an old concrete apartment (for a couple more days). No AM radio for me either.

Maybe not clear...I try to keep to rhythms to keep me from wandering too far away. Doesn't generate clarity as much a lines in which to color. But thanks for kind words!