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Post by hester_prynne » November 9th, 2007, 6:10 pm

Black crow
landed on my shoulder.
Ghostlike,
peripheral apparition.
Gave me
seeeeeeeeee-thru eyes,
straight through
to your sins.
They were floating,
face up,
in a pool of guilt,
around your soul,
which drained a little bit,
under my direct gaze.
Emptying it completely,
however,
will be up to you.
"I am a victim of society, and, an entertainer"........DW
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Post by Doreen Peri » November 9th, 2007, 6:26 pm

fabulous piece

i love this!
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Post by mousey1 » November 9th, 2007, 7:05 pm

Perfect.
I used to walk with my head in the clouds but I kept getting struck by lightning!
Now my head twitches and I drool alot. Anonymouse

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Post by mnaz » November 11th, 2007, 5:38 am

and you as well...

piercing read, hest. that is what you do, and well.
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Post by Dave The Dov » November 11th, 2007, 7:19 am

Nevermore!!!!
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Post by stilltrucking » November 11th, 2007, 8:25 am

excellent write
I can use this one





you are my favorite star gazer Theda
thank you
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Post by Totenkopf » November 11th, 2007, 11:06 am

Re: "Up in you"

Well-done, H. Rather superior to say the usual Gary Muledeer metaphysics.
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Post by Perdida » November 16th, 2007, 6:10 pm

Oh my, this rocks!

love it

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