Crashed and Burned

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Redstormy
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Crashed and Burned

Post by Redstormy » December 14th, 2004, 7:43 pm

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Crashed and Burned

Been repeating
.....one line
.....in my head for days.
Can’t mold a poem around it,
words fall off like wet clay.
Leaving the line
........cold and alone,
but I’ll collect it in
.............my word basket
and save it for
...........a mind clear day.


My mind’s stilled and null,
hodgepodge of thoughts
crossed in me.


My muse swims in dish water,
......narrates poems
.......I forget before I’m done.

So I sing my word
.........in the shower
.................as my hands
....................slide over
my own sudsy curves
...................and
as water makes helicopter
.............sounds in my hair,
my muse
........has crashed and burned.

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Post by Lightning Rod » December 14th, 2004, 10:56 pm

welcome to Studio Eight, Red

lovely picture (whose is it?)

I'll look for more of your work.
"These words don't make me a poet, these Eyes make me a poet."

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Post by judih » December 15th, 2004, 2:39 am

hi red,
hope your muse revives
and jumps out of the suds
to shake, bubble and thrive

judih

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Post by Doreen Peri » December 15th, 2004, 11:58 pm

My muse swims in dish water,
......narrates poems
.......I forget before I’m done.

So I sing my word
.........in the shower
.................as my hands
....................slide over
my own sudsy curves
...................and
as water makes helicopter
.............sounds in my hair,
my muse
........has crashed and burned.


I love the helicopter image especially, Red... but you have many lovely images in here...

The image you posted to accompany your images is also lovely... (who's the artist?)

Thanks for sharing this piece... I'm looking forward to reading more of your work.

I know all about crashed and burned... yep... and lines that run around in my head and never come out except in the shower when I'm sudsing..... mmmmmm.... love that! :D

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Post by Redstormy » December 17th, 2004, 2:17 am

Thank you all so much, I'm not sure who did the picture a friend of mine sent it to me for a picture challenge write. Glad you liked the poem. Sorry I have not been around, I fell on the ice Tuesday night and my arm is in a sling.

Red

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Post by judih » December 17th, 2004, 2:31 am

arm in a sling?
crashed, burned but home
glad you're safely slung

take care

judih

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Post by Redstormy » December 17th, 2004, 2:45 am

Aww thank you Judih, I can write with two hands today so I guess that's progress. :)

Red

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