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- constantine
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this is a fine poem and has all the qualities...
this is a fine poem and has all the qualities that a 25 line poem should possess
based on past experience
it'll take around three months
for me to hate your guts
your neurosis will grind into mine
like a b-girl's hips
only without the stimulation
or the tawdry pleasure of her company
with her at least avarice overrides
the emotional - the psychological
it's purely a matter of give and take
economically speaking -
a deal on the up and up
but I wax abstract, so
for those who prefer
thecleartheconcisetheconcrete
I offer the following:
get bent
this is my poem
this is what I'm compelled to say
-- what's he trying to say?
-- he's got absolutely nothing to say!
this is my neurosis grinding into yours
it's always been that way
just because I invite you into my house
doesn't mean I want you to move in.
I drink my coffee black.
based on past experience
it'll take around three months
for me to hate your guts
your neurosis will grind into mine
like a b-girl's hips
only without the stimulation
or the tawdry pleasure of her company
with her at least avarice overrides
the emotional - the psychological
it's purely a matter of give and take
economically speaking -
a deal on the up and up
but I wax abstract, so
for those who prefer
thecleartheconcisetheconcrete
I offer the following:
get bent
this is my poem
this is what I'm compelled to say
-- what's he trying to say?
-- he's got absolutely nothing to say!
this is my neurosis grinding into yours
it's always been that way
just because I invite you into my house
doesn't mean I want you to move in.
I drink my coffee black.
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doreen, this isn't directed at anyone in particular except perhaps english professors i've had , and critiques that pissed me off. L-Rod, don't take this as a personal deal (as it is reminiscent of an earlier comment of mine on your poem)- hell man, i don't know you well enough to hate you! the chinese soap wrapper lingo just blew my mind. i posted it on pib after an ongoing debate on critiquing - to rile em up!
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I didn't think it was directed at anyone in particular here, dino.
Good writing... I repeat! I've written what I think are some of my most powerful pieces when I was pissed off. Just sayin'.... there's something about being riled up that works in poetry and this piece works. Sometimes it takes an English professor, a chinese soap wrapper, a debate on critiquing... whatever it takes... to inspire good poetry. And this is good poetry.
Good writing... I repeat! I've written what I think are some of my most powerful pieces when I was pissed off. Just sayin'.... there's something about being riled up that works in poetry and this piece works. Sometimes it takes an English professor, a chinese soap wrapper, a debate on critiquing... whatever it takes... to inspire good poetry. And this is good poetry.
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jesus h christ
what's the word coming to
L Rod never uses emoticons
My most favoirte subtle threat I have ever read on studio eight came from a college professor to L Rod
"shut up or I will shut you up"
don't get much more sublte than that
poetry beats the hell out of me
black and blue
and red all over.
what's the word coming to
L Rod never uses emoticons
My most favoirte subtle threat I have ever read on studio eight came from a college professor to L Rod
"shut up or I will shut you up"
don't get much more sublte than that
poetry beats the hell out of me
black and blue
and red all over.
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no, i live in dayton ohwhyoh. moving to cincinnati to complete my studies. ancient history and art history major. after i'm done, i'll come back to balto. i miss it a lot. my family and friends . will be reading there on 4/18 at north and charles at loads of fun - doreen, wireman, and the exquisite terri will be there too. you ever go back?
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