The Bracelet

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The Bracelet

Post by Lightning Rod » June 25th, 2008, 11:27 pm

I took the bracelet off today
it's been five years since it's been unclasped
I wore it in the bath, I wore it to bed
I thought I would wear it until I was dead

But bling is bling
at least it didn't turn my wrist green
but I'll miss waking up at night
with it tangled in my hair
"These words don't make me a poet, these Eyes make me a poet."

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Post by gypsyjoker » June 25th, 2008, 11:34 pm

I cut my hair
for the first time in years
I had to
I did not know how to take care of it myself.


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Post by westcoast » June 25th, 2008, 11:49 pm

tugs at the heartstrings... very nice LRod.

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Post by Doreen Peri » June 26th, 2008, 8:20 am

I once threw my wedding ring out the window driving on the beltway going 85 miles an hour.

I'm sorry about the bracelet.

Your poem brought tears to my eyes.
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Post by saw » June 26th, 2008, 12:44 pm

a great deal of emotion compressed into 8 poignant lines....
this takes a whole lotta skill........terrific conservation emphasizes
the beauty.....nice work, elrod..........
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Post by emel.scott » June 26th, 2008, 1:27 pm

I'm a master goldsmith but I regret that I can't fix that...
We should not mind if on our ear there fell. Some less of cunning, more of oracle...Thoreau
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Post by hester_prynne » June 26th, 2008, 3:18 pm

Aw.....
I love/hate this one.
Excellent LRod....
H 8)
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Post by Lightning Rod » June 29th, 2008, 9:14 pm

thank you ladies for seeing this poem and appreciating it for the simple image that it is

and doreen, I didn't take it off in rage or anger, it was deliberately and reluctantly and calmly. I didn't throw it out the window of a speeding car. I don't wear it, but I don't know if I can part with it. It's in a safe place.
"These words don't make me a poet, these Eyes make me a poet."

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