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Post by **bennie2** » July 17th, 2008, 2:05 pm

it isn't dance, she slips, i saw a small dove fracture, her angel's jaw. the dewdrop sunburn dream like shine - a magnificent peninsula - licked by the womb of a depressing life, ulcerated cranium, perpetual fight. throw me a smashed flower, she screams. i throw and she collects the pieces to form a newer, more exotic flower, one whose fragrance is earth and sky, air and water, boy and girl. her small red wine lips and eastern european cheekbones. blonde hair smile. pixie frame hidden in a petticoat. is this love or a cocaine first experience....

Post by **mtmynd** » July 17th, 2008, 2:53 pm

definitely a cocaine first experience! at least my first cocaine experience was pure lust and nothing but lust.

(too bad lust later got shoved out of the way to make room for cocaine. bastard drug.)

Post by **goldenmyst** » July 17th, 2008, 3:10 pm

Bennie, not having had experience with the later I don't know. Your poem is a riot.

John

Post by **SmileGRL** » July 17th, 2008, 4:34 pm

...but didn't you know smashed angels like to dance slips slides bare foot over your heart and shoot your soul straight into their veins, because. just because, okay? she can and she will make you wonder if you saw what you think you didn't see and or maybe that was a fairy with red lips hiding in your wounds. it all depends on where you stick the needle and if you throw her a flower with a soul that smells like home...

Post by **hester_prynne** » July 17th, 2008, 4:40 pm

Indeed smilegrl, I couldn't have said it half as good as you did.
I rode the cocaine train awhile, years ago....glad I got off it, nothing romantic about it for me....although, I did like this paragraph here Bennie, you have this uncanny ability (methinks) to put syrup in closed concrete.
H

Post by **saw** » July 17th, 2008, 4:47 pm

send me dead flowers
in the mornin'
send me dead flowers
by the mail
send me dead flowers
at my wedding
and I won't forget to
put roses on your grave
.......guess this makes you the
Mick Jagger of poetry.......highly entertaining work....peace....steve

Post by **Lightning Rod** » July 17th, 2008, 5:22 pm

I don't know if bennie's piece was more enjoyable or SmileG's response

both great writing--impressionistic

Post by **SmileGRL** » July 18th, 2008, 7:55 am

thank you kindly hester and lightning rod (and sorry bennie for stealing a little air time

you inspired my pen to spontaneously bleed ink )

...never did cocaine. my reply is more figuratively speaking and based on the response of the smashed flower with the fractured past licking her wounds with self taught survival tricks (like i did/would...err...maybe

)

you truly inspire, bennie of the red pants

Post by **Arcadia** » July 18th, 2008, 10:14 am

definitely beautiful one way or another!!!!

a kind of dylan thomas-conan doyle-cortazar thing in technicolor !!!!

bravo bennie & smilegrl!!!!!

Post by **bennie2** » July 18th, 2008, 2:48 pm

thank you, all. just a wee verse-o-rant from the pit of brain i call soul.

smilegrl... you can steal my airtime more often if the air you steal produces fruits like this. such a lovely response. glad to have helped get it out of you.

mick jagger of poetry? not sure i like that. why can't i be the keef of poetry?

Post by **westcoast** » July 18th, 2008, 8:05 pm

you are such a poet

~westie

Post by **SmileGRL** » July 23rd, 2008, 4:29 pm

bennie...i have 2 pictures for you...

<a href="http://picasaweb.google.com/SmileGRL34/ ... 4210"><img src="http://lh3.ggpht.com/SmileGRL34/SIeTOGD ... s.jpg"></a>

&

<a href="http://picasaweb.google.com/SmileGRL34/ ... 5858"><img src="http://lh5.ggpht.com/SmileGRL34/SISIJRq ... 3.jpg"></a>

this one is a merge of a photograph & my favorite angel pic (downloaded the angel pic from the internet a couple of years ago. could only find it as a free screensaver on cellphones when i searched the web for the original artist the other day...so i guess it's a freebie???), edited into my version of a smashed angel...

thought you'd enjoy...

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