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Post by bennie2 » July 21st, 2008, 5:03 pm

it isn't always, but sometimes, that she comes to me, alive, electric.
her short cut hair bristles across my cheek,
the recent cigarette smell of her breath lies along my nostrils
her hard-bodied presence tangles in my arms.
my hands reach for the small of her back, the warmth of her neck,
and come away, instead, with first-fulls of shadows, memories.
her black dog is dead in my head -
there is no room in fond remembrance for negativity.

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i'm looking forward to that Neruda day when i can say "though this be the last pain that she makes me suffer and these the last verses that I write for her."

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Post by mnaz » July 21st, 2008, 11:54 pm

'cigarette smell of her breath'...

That's refreshingly honest.
Sometimes I think we don't get enough honesty.

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Post by Lightning Rod » July 22nd, 2008, 12:00 am

mnaz wrote:'cigarette smell of her breath'...

That's refreshingly honest.
Sometimes I think we don't get enough honesty.
how about, "her pussy was a little pissy."
?
"These words don't make me a poet, these Eyes make me a poet."

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Post by mnaz » July 22nd, 2008, 12:02 am

well, depending on context, that could be refreshingly honest too!

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Post by bennie2 » July 22nd, 2008, 12:35 pm

little prissy missy
her pussy was a little pissy

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