Katherine

[saw]

I mailed you the original copy
of the love song I wrote for you,
the one with all the scratch-outs
and the coffee stains,
the one that found its way
into every room in our house,
the song whose title is your name.

I won't be singing it anymore,

and it was taking up space
in my songbook.
The verses once as hot as
your hand on my leg, seem
stupid.
The refrain that pledged my love
is as relevant as the envelope
I mailed it in.

This is your official notice,

in case you thought the lyrics
were immortal,
the song is as unwelcome here
as I am at your new apartment.
I've destroyed the copies that were
in my guitar case, so this is the last of it,

I want to forget the words as soon as possible.

[SmileGRL]

isn't it so sad when you can't even look at the things you've created with so much love for that person not in your life anymore...when you need to cut everything out that makes you feel, that breaks your heart all over again.

steve...this is me sending you a hug. life sucks sometimes.

[mtmynd]

steve-aw... i doubt if you meant this piece to be like i read it... it's so fucking personal... but i gotta tell you this made me laugh... I found this to be a very comical happening... with lines like:

"The verses once as hot as your hand on my leg, seem stupid."

"The refrain that pledged my love is as relevant as the envelope I mailed it in."

"... the song is as unwelcome here as I am at your new apartment."

What a gift of words here... really gave me a great chuckle... and i don't mean to denigrate this at all. It's a powerfully funny and clever piece.

[Doreen Peri]

Great poem!

Love the stanza breaks, too!

[saw]

thanx SmilGRL, mtmynd and doreen for the feedback...the poem does come from a real experience, over twenty years ago, that at the time was devastating ...a 4 yr. relationship ending....major turmoil.....

the poem however wasn't written until 3 yrs. ago
I was actually trying to write a poem that could be taken more ways than one, and seems I have succeeded.......

thanx again for the comments as this is the only way we poets know
what levels their work is working on, and I'm pleased that this effort was able to stir the original emotion, as well as the somewhat
cavalier emotions of the particular language I chose.

thanx doreen for approving the stanza breaks in this...it's funny,
cause I changed them to post here, prior to the discussion on PIB.
you must have telepathically reached me.........peace

[hester_prynne]

Oh yeah, man this is another gem of yours saw, seems they all are..I just really dig this...really felt it, the way you expressed this, creative, interesting...again I just can relate to your writing so much....
H

[saw]

thanx hest.....you're so kind with your words.....Always a pleasure to hear from ya.....steve

[Odette]

Well said.