Kibitzing the Alter Ego

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mtmynd
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Kibitzing the Alter Ego

Post by mtmynd » July 28th, 2008, 12:20 pm

the inevitable consequence of reality
is the formulation of destiny based upon need

-----[what the fuck you talkin about?]

the alternative to reality is found beyond

-----[beyond? beyond what, dude?]

and therein lies the totality of your fragrance

-----[fragrance? what you smellin' here, man?]

for where the origins of being scream
desolate in its loneliness

-----[desolation? aint that kinda 'without' ?]

is the voice that panders to the reality
slowly engulfing the beauty of life

-----[engulfing the beauty of life? what kinda shit is that?]

that is sequestered to the cross of your own hang
the bloody drift of fragility stung in your side

-----[whoa, dude... what kinda trip you on here...?]

the blood is only dripping down
but it is the spirit that wafts the airs

-----['wafts the airs'...shit, wha'choo been smokin'?]

in an ever-spiraling ascent to the universal
the body yet a prisoner to the phantom ghosts
that haunt the e-gone now carbon-based temporarity

-----[o, for gawdz sake....what the hell are you tryin' to say?]

flushing the false gems of perpetuity from the soul
leaving the brightness of love to beacon-shine brightly

-----['beacon-shine'...what is this weird stuff? damn! ]

the cascading effervescence overflowing within
as all becomes nine inches away from the taco bell
clanging mercilessly onto empty streets of pain

-----[sure...whatever....taco bell, my ass...]

the alleyways swept free of nonsense

-----[nonsense i'll tell you nonsense, dude...yeah nonsense]

perpendicularity stares into the mirrored void
wherein lies the unfortunate parallel of gauze
disguising the falsity of backwardness tripping
over itself in a futile attempt of rebirth

-----[ok, ok...whatever ..... freedom of speech to each....]

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Arcadia
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Post by Arcadia » July 28th, 2008, 1:11 pm

:lol: great!!!!!!

mtmynd
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Post by mtmynd » July 28th, 2008, 3:40 pm

otro vez, amiga mia 'V'.. muchisimas gracias a usted. si, es verdad, este es muy complicado para muchos gentes, pero las palabras estan el verdad, no? :)

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Post by saw » July 28th, 2008, 3:43 pm

Can I get a witness?.......AMEN, brother!
If you do not change your direction
you may end up where you are heading

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constantine
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Post by constantine » July 28th, 2008, 4:54 pm

way cool. wildly original.

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