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Post by SmileGRL » July 29th, 2008, 11:29 am

i am a snow flake
melting in your mouth
melting. melt-
ing
.

and when you need me
just touch your fingers to your lips
and feel me there. in your breath
or plant me in your hand
and blow me like a kiss
to the stars & beyond

and when i need you
i'll think of you
blowing kisses
all over me

.

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Post by goldenmyst » July 29th, 2008, 12:04 pm

This swept me away. You play with words in a way which is divinely beautiful. I feel like I've taken a warm bubble bath when I imbibe your verse.

John

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Post by bennie2 » July 29th, 2008, 2:04 pm

beautiful sentiment you've expressed here, mj.
"plant me in your hand/and blow me like a kiss/to the stars and beyond"
this made me think of delicate but prolonged motion. as soft as a blown kiss but prolonged enough to get you to the stars.

like a soft, slightly warm tidal wave flowing upwards, carrying you on its crest, nuzzling, caressing, protecting "to the stars and beyond"

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Post by SmileGRL » July 29th, 2008, 5:22 pm

john...i love bubble baths so that's a pretty cool comparison. thank you from my heart

bennie...exactly...

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Post by Perdida » July 29th, 2008, 5:33 pm

my first thoughts after reading this were, "oh wow" then it was "yessss"

Beautiful, is just not enough for this piece, those ending lines had ME melting.

Thank you :D
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Post by mtmynd » July 29th, 2008, 6:09 pm

your melt is hot. ;)

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Post by Odette » July 29th, 2008, 7:34 pm

Sensuel. Très bon.

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Post by SmileGRL » July 30th, 2008, 9:54 am

perdida, cecil, odette...*she curtsies* thank you kindly

melt i do
like chocolat
fondue... :wink:

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