notebook notes from a stormy train ride (friday morning)

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notebook notes from a stormy train ride (friday morning)

Post by bennie2 » August 3rd, 2008, 10:30 am

clouds perfume the air with their electrical stare
the black, funeral mantel - angry, inverted mirror, reflecting nothing, expressing everything.
everything below seems somehow brighter under this heavy furrowed brow.
the impending tension of the storm - electricity dancing hysterically in a vacuum jar.
birds fly scared in the air as the train, brave in the rain, swims over tracks illuminated by pink-headed, yellow-headed flowers in the grass.
stopping at a station I see a symphony of ripples performing their individual minuscule act on a platform puddle -
the audience of red faded pink railings and quickly rendered graffiti stand unamused like the sky.

a fresh breeze picks up and the sense of a cooler morning lifts the day's spirits.
the sky's edges lighten, her tears subside and her moody brow is ironed out...

the sign of cranes on the edge of the upside down bowl herald Glasgow's arrival.
tall buildings' wet shoulders are huddled together...

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Post by Arcadia » August 3rd, 2008, 10:52 am

stopping at a station I see a symphony of ripples performing their individual minuscule act on a platform puddle -
the audience of red faded pink railings and quickly rendered graffiti stand unamused like the sky.


tall buildings' wet shoulders are huddled together...

amazing & so beautiful!!!!!! thanks!!!

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Post by mnaz » August 3rd, 2008, 1:39 pm

This is witness to power of.. It is lyrical.
You see so much.

(On a weather note, you must live in the same climate I live in).

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Post by bennie2 » August 3rd, 2008, 1:42 pm

you're very welcome, arcadia. thank you for reading it.

thanks, mnaz. what's you're location on this planet?

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Post by mnaz » August 3rd, 2008, 2:25 pm

The Great Pac-Northwest (NW of contiguous USA at least).
Maybe this was the perfect place for me all along.
Such moderation!... the gray area is pervasive!
And the storms are few and far between.
It never seems to get too angry here.
Just gray. And puffy sometimes.

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Post by bennie2 » August 3rd, 2008, 2:33 pm

scotland is similar to what you described. it rarely gets too angry. never too hot for long periods, never insanely cold...

Scotland is on the same latitude as Newfoundland and Labrador but thanks to the gulf stream we stay relatively warm. i think, by rights, we should be under snow for most of the year.

the main problem with scottish weather (if you want to see it as a problem) is the lack of predictability of it. the weather changes from moment to moment. you never know what to wear. but we get lots of rain, lots of dull days... but like your situation, it's never too angry here.

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Post by Lightning Rod » August 3rd, 2008, 3:31 pm

it's 107 in Dallas today
would I call that severe?
I've seen worse
it does get angry here
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Post by mtmynd » August 3rd, 2008, 4:12 pm

Bennie and mnaz... i can only picture your weather and when i do i become envious. i think i would become alive in climates like yours... not perched on the border of death and emotional drought.

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Post by SmileGRL » August 5th, 2008, 5:03 pm

your words paint the sky with that rainbow feeling after the storm and the morning so crisp it cools the frown inside with the beauty of flowers painted on the grass passing me by like a train skipping puddles on platforms on my way to you where i would have watched the whole thing with awe in my throat together with you curled in your ear as your hand wrote it down for me to feel. i did...

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